|Reviews for Merger of Cursed Worlds|
| Silver2010 3/31/13 . chapter 10
I thought this story was alright. I am going to make some suggestions that may help you write better in the future. The plot seemed rushed in the beginning and had too many run on sentences. Another problem I noticed was that you didn't put some words in where they were needed. It is expected of Shampoo, Ling-Ling and Lung-Lung to speak broken Japanese (though it's broken English to us), because they aren't speaking Chinese. All of the other characters, even Cologne (despite her native language being Chinese), should have spoken much better than they did. I know that each character has their own way of speaking. However, it didn't seem like you were showing that in the dialogue. There were also numbers in words that shouldn't be there and a lot of typos. Please re-read your stories before you post them. You never know if something is wrong in the story until you leave it for at least a day or two and then go back to it. If you are unwilling to edit it yourself then you can ask a beta reader. All you have to do is ask around and explain what you want to do. If they don't agree, then you can just try asking someone else. It is not very hard. I think it took me about 15 minutes to a half hour to find someone in the beta list that I wanted to beta for me. Just write a list of multiple people to do each category. This way if one writer knows about one category, but doesn't know or want to know the other, then you have a back up. Examples of categories that I am talking about are One Piece, Naruto, Ranma 1/2, Inuyasha, Bleach and Harry Potter. Those are the ones that I am the most familiar with, even if I lost interest in watching Bleach after Rukia was saved.
| P0is0ned-Candy 2/18/13 . chapter 3
Ukyo could cook.
| Plumalchemyst 3/2/12 . chapter 2
Poor Sanji anyway why why would they volunteer Akane
| Plumalchemyst 3/2/12 . chapter 1
Fruit Salad really I mean yeah devil fruits but how many pirate worlds are there that you can use a doubloon or jolly roger
| Guest 7/25/10 . chapter 9
"Also the reason why she used Gum Gum Rapid fire was because she doesn't' know how to spell the original version."
...like you've cared about spelling before in this story...?
| Guest 7/25/10 . chapter 5
Luffy and Sanji...
To 12 year olds...
| UsopppLover4Ever 7/26/09 . chapter 1
LOL! Pig boi has a worse sense of direction than Zolo and Luffy combined!
| Prinny Ramza 3/4/06 . chapter 7
Good story, and if you want to know how to get Mihawk try they have pretty good game information.
| nld200xy 1/18/06 . chapter 1
This is funny. Sadly, I've only seen the first three episode of Ranma, so I only know 6 of those characters. Anyway, all of this is so typical! Damn... "Black Rose"... last I checked, he was calling himself names like "Blue Thunder" and "Red Flame".
| kiyone4ever 11/11/05 . chapter 10
I loved it! (Sorry for the delay, I've been offline for a while!) I hope you'll bring Ling-Ling and Lung-Lung back sometime. They could meet Trunks and Goten or Tenchi and Seina or something like that.
| Suuki-Aldrea 11/3/05 . chapter 10
This was a great story! I would love to see what other strories you will write. Oh, do you think you will be writing a sequel to this? I hope you do! Ja ne!
| Suuki-Aldrea 10/26/05 . chapter 8
I love it! And maybe I will check out King of Kings. Update soon please! Ja ne!
| kiyone4ever 10/22/05 . chapter 7
Nice Chapter! You don't have to hide the video game, we've all done things like that! Serena playing Sailor V, or me playing Soul Calibur II so hard for a week and turning my thumb nail black! I know Brock will want to see the Nurse Joy convention! (I suspect that the girls from Sailor Moon, Tenchi, Ranma, and Love Hina are all on vacation also renting rooms at the hotel... I know there will be enough nurses, but will there be enough paramedics?)
Oh, I'll be glad to have Dark Venus take care of the FOX execs behind 4kids! She'll have great fun changing their minds... Literally! (Hey, villianesses take pride in their work too and they need good anime to survive so they can all find work!) The only problem I can see is that her victim has to have more brains than a mayonaisse sandwich for her mind powers to work...
| kiyone4ever 10/21/05 . chapter 6
So far so good! But going crazy for update! Did somebody let Ryoga steer the next chapter?
I was going to suggest that maybe Happosai, Sanji, and Miroku needed to take remedial pervert lessons from Nobuyuki Masaki, but Nobuyuki's behavior has always been just a front for a much more shy man inside (He's been pretending for so long, I think he believes it himsel, but Achika would tell you who her Nobuyuki is.)
So what effect will Happosai have with Sanji... If he starts acting twitchy near Lung-Lung, will Sanji ignore it or actually guide Happosai away... or will he just let Lung-Lung beat the daylights out of him so he can watch some other pervert get pummeled for a change...
| Suuki-Aldrea 10/12/05 . chapter 6
Love it! And it is going to be Akane that's kiddnapped! Update soon please! Ja ne!