Such a sad story...but very well written.

that was so beautiful very dark but beatiful it reminded me of a poem style almost it was amazing i loved it update soon with more please

it was really good ever thought about entering it into a contest?

awesome story!

Well it was like really good, but when she is dying if you want to keep the sad ending then I think that you should make the ending more...emotional. However, everything else in it was real good

I'm a day late and a dollar very short on this review, but have just started reading your work (in part to reciprocate those kind reviews you've left for me). This is really excellent writing! I often wondered what happened to those soulmate couples who, as described in the books, were overwhelmed by their connection. While it's nice to think of their happy endings and salvations, another aspect of finding a soulmate is the forced confrontation with your true self-however good or bad that may be.

...Anyway, I thought this piece was a good exploration of the soulmate connection's darker (or at least more bittersweet) side. Very nicely done.

This story is so *so* so sad. Seriously, I think I would've teared up, but my Dad came in and I had to blink it away, although I DID feel as if my heart choked and my throat closed up for a while... so sad... :(

Wow. This is completely amazing- dreary and dreamy and dark and brilliant. With few descriptive words of hair or appearance, complete pictures are made.

Beautiful...and sad. Really, it seems like most soulmate stories out there end happily ever after. It couldn't really be like that...anyway, it's a good story.

It's cool...but I don't think you should continue it. Its a really beautiful story, but somehow I think continueing it would...I don't know, ruin it. I think you should leave it as it is.

I like it. I'm not sure what to think of it; it makes a great, if vague, stand-alone piece, but it would make an equally great novel. Anyway, I enjoyed it, and thank you for posting.

Kiana- I can't tell if you have a hoplessly pessimistic outlook on love or if you find a pleasant sorrow in writing like this- I understand, but where is your happy ending?

;_; Awwwww. Ok, that was depressing. Extremely good and well written, but depressing. I'm gonna go find a vat of cookie dough icecream now and seek solace in it.

So sad... What a sad, but fitting ending. No names mentioned but i fell in love with both characters. I won't petition for a happy ending, because the fic was perfect in itself. I WOULD like an epilogue, though. Only if you want to write it. I won't care if it was happy or sad...

dannnnng yo...girl u can write...this is like a masterpiece, not just art...ya kno...basically one words sums this up...dayummmmmzzzz

I like it. I wasn't exactly expecting the girl, Niva, to die, though. But it's very good. I love it!