NO

I wanted her to stay with Tom!! I loved their r/ship. It was very sad. :(


But brilliant.

Jen x


P.S. Devon isn't a city :P

I just wanted to add one thing - I wasn't a big fan of Tom committing suicide, but you did do something that most authors don't do - you made the happy ending kind of bittersweet. I mean, a lot of authors end their stories with Tom and Hermione drinking butterbeer together in the Gryffindor common room or something ridiculous like that. At least here you made the happiness kind of hollow b/c of Tom's death and all.
I think you ended it kind up abruptly though...it seems like Hermione has some internal issues to resolve, like where her loyalties lie.
Overall, great story! I'm currently reading your other fic, a Love through time, and it's quite interesting. I've read a draco/hermione fic thats somewhat similar - it's called once upon a thyme. have you read it?

i cracked up when i read that tom committed suicide...i mean, the great lord voldemort, whose only fear is death, committing suicide...rather OOC, in m opinion. I didn't really like that ending of yours. The story's premise was all right but it became rather monotonous as the story went on.
A few things which i must congratulate you on:
- portrayal of hermione - level headed, not a bimbo like some fics describe her
- story in the future-interesting subplot

good job, overall!

So not only am I very upset about the ending, but it actually made me cry. I'm not a Ron-hater or anything, I actually love him to bits, but I'm very unsatisfied :/

Nevertheless, this was very good. Lots of spelling mistakes (though most of them reoccurring, 'the' instead of 'they' and such), but I learned to ignore them.

I'm more than sure out of the 600+ reviews you've gotten, you've already been told this multiple times, but I'm going to say it again. PotO didn't come out til 1986. This bothered me immensely, but after reading the scene where Tom and Hermione were practicing 'The Mirror/Phantom of the Opera/Music of the Night', I learned to ignore that as well. I literally swooned over 'Music of the Night', and can't listen to it without picturing Christian Coulson's body with Michael Crawford's voice. (An image to DIE FOR.)

I tip my hat to you for taking an idea I would have thought as ridiculously idiotic and making me fall in love with it.

Happy Writing!

wow that was amazing. i cried in the last chapter. i loved it. keep writing!

Can I just say wow?! This story was amazing! I love it just as much as A Love Through Time, which is one of my favorite fan fictions. I almost started crying when I read that Tom committed suicide, and do you have any idea how hard it is to make me cry? Anyway, I think that you did a superb job of accurately portraying the romance between Tom and Hermione, and for that, I say, "bravo". Keep up the good work!

Wicked Sapphira

PS. Don't let the people who said, in as many words, that your story sucked get to you, because a) your story was wonderful and you have a talent for writing, and b) those people are sore losers who have nothing better to do than to insult people.

...Perhaps a bit late, but due to your many references I take it you read the half blood prince, thusly then did you not realize Snape had been ordered to kill Dumbledore by Dumbledore himself? Perhaps you decided to change that...

Past couple of chapters are improved from the prior quality. Less dialogue and your characters are gaining more distinct personalities though they still share many mannerisms that do not quite fit with certain character's natures. If such improvement proves to continue throughout the rest, I think I may be pleasantly surprised.

I can see great potential in this fic and am sure that that potential only continues to flourish throughout the rest of this fic.
You seem to have all the tools of a good writer but the lack of skill or familiarity to use them properly. First and foremost, characterization and believability seem to be your major problems. Most of your characters have the same manners of speaking (which seems to be a predominantly that of common young teenage speech), similar mannerism, and ultimately similar personalities.
If you take Dumbledore for example, he is a mature, old wizard even during the 1940's with a knack for knowing anything and a mind so quick very little gets by him. His less than composed, somewhat dumbfounded lack capability in his meeting which Hermione is highly uncharacteristic and far more the behavior of Ron or Harry. Because of such tendencies believability of your fic is also compromised as even an OOC Dumbledore is still likely to have more composure, mature pateterns of speech, and a knack for observation given the sheer number of years he has lived.
Next, you seem to have a habit common to many aspiring writers I hafe seen on FF . net, and that is the tendency to make chapters composed of mostly speech with little in way of literary devices that enrich your fic such as imagery, setting, mood, forebodying, and greater development into personality and point of view.
Sentence variation also should be used to create smoother rhytms to your writing.

To be honest, when i started reading this story, i was hardly impressed. But, Alas, i persevered and read it through to the end. Of all the fanfics, this is the only one that made me cry. Very bittersweet; i applaud you!

Wow! Intense scene with Hermione/Alice and Tom.

I'm loving the story so far, I have Phantom of the Opera on DVD but I've only watched it once.

Can't wait to red on!

Romantic
xx

I really liked this fan fic, I actually cried at the end. Just amazing story, just amazing.

Santa Baby was written in 1953, and considering it's the 40's the people should be suspicious of a song that doesn't even exist. Great story though.

I'm enjoying this story quite a bit--I've been on a Hermione/Tom kick lately, and this one popped up as a good option. The only issue I have is that the version of Phantom you're using is clearly from the 2004 movie (stage version is different), and Andrew Lloyd Webber, who wrote/composed the popular version wasn't even born until four years after this story takes place :(

However, I am enjoying picturing them in their respective roles, especially because I just watched the movie version this evening, without realizing I'd be reading about it!

Loved it. I was in tears this last chapter. really great. your a brilliant writer. please carry on writing your amazing!