This is the ONLY poem I've ever liked on this entire site! I also like the seven/clever lines a lot. This is really interesting, the way you've incorporated her dialogue and conveyed her dreamy, restless thoughts.

Nice work!

Yayayay! I love it, even though I've never seen Gormenghast, I got the general idea of it (from you), and this makes lots of sense! I like the rhyme a lot, and the meaning really hits home, anyone could relate, even if they have never seen the movie. Everyone sometimes sees that their knight in shining armour is not know they think he is. And then the mask! THAT reminded me of Phantom of the Opera! It was the first thing I thought of!! ^^ Way cool, I realy like it! I really liked these lines:Get on your white horse and ride away

Let's get on your white horse and ride away

Storm clouds are coming, I'm counting seven

Seven for longing, secrets, and heaven

I dream of you but I can't dream forever

It's all nonsense anyway- and you're too clever.

awesome rhyming, i love it!

~Linwe