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| Sinister2004 2007-06-11 ch 6,  | abuseI read all of the chapters and I have to say I'm really enjoying the Edriss/Eva dynamic. There's a lot of psychology there you could explore and man I actually found myself rooting for the Yeerks so you did a good job on making Visser One actually a sympathetic character. That was a good thing. Just a couple of things though. I wish we could have seen more of the space battle. That would have been a great scene to describe for the reader. And perhaps you could just beef up description overall. A bunch of one lines kinda looks like the story is sparse when the narrative should be more spread out. |
| voodooqueen126 2006-12-04 ch 2, | abuseThis is a really good story!! I really hope you continue it! |
| XxaRchaNgLexX 2006-06-14 ch 6, | abusei LOVE this story! ilovethisilovethisiSMIPLYlovethis! m... it's slighty ooc, but loves iot all the same! |
| amane's quill 2006-04-26 ch 6, | abuseBad cliffie. Evil cliffie. I feel so bad for Edriss. Please continue soon. I was delighted when you updated. |
| voodooqueen126 2006-04-11 ch 6, | abuseI LOVE IT! it's brillian-i actually enjoy the evolution of Edriss's character, you've got it really right. |
| Sinister Shadow 2006-04-10 ch 6, | abuseI already told you what I thought of this chapter, but I thought it would be nice of me to say it again. This. Is. Brilliant. Please update soon! :D |
| Edriss 2006-04-10 ch 6, | abuseThis was an interesting chapter, :). Visser Three certainly is a cruel Yeerk isn't he? I think you've managed to keep him in character very well. As for Edriss; it is a rather odd situation to be in, to know that you're gonna die. I suppose it would be enough to put anyone OOC. |
| Anifan1 2006-04-10 ch 6, anon. | abuseSome of Edriss' language is a little OOC, but the rest of it is very good. It feels like it's coming to an end soon...I hope that's not the case. |
| Quillian 2006-04-10 ch 6, | abuseKharina! :D So great to hear from you again and get another update to one of your fics! Anyway, I believe that this chapter was brilliant. Looking forward to more! |
| Ember Nickel 2006-04-10 ch 6, | abuseAh, so that's why you quoted Atticus in your signature! Very cool. |
| aizxana 2006-01-17 ch 5, | abuseAnother great chapter, the part where V1 talks about Malbrons habits with is hosts was very moving. But my fave line had to be V1's first words to V3, very funny! |
| aizxana 2006-01-17 ch 4, | abuseWoot, a bit of CF! And I loved your descriptions of the Anati. |
| amane's quill 2005-12-23 ch 1, | abuseThis is good - in fact I think I see fave material here. You should really continue it. I like it too when as Eva puts it, Edriss is not acting like ' a cold blooded monster.' And the part with Visser Three was really amusing. |
| TobiasHawk13 2005-11-16 ch 5, | abuseGOOD STOYR! I TDLO U ILL REVIEW!UP DATEsoon! |
| Kaduca 2005-11-14 ch 5, anon. | abuseHey this is Kaduca from the forum! What an excellent story! I really like the connection you've made between Visser One and Eva. And the V3 thing was funny! I hope you update soon! |