Reviews for Demonic Salvation

Reviews For: Demonic Salvation

0.o person 2008-03-05 ch 2, anon.	abuseplease UPDATE SOON! if you still have the idea rolling around in your head, seeing that its now '08 and all... - -' erm... lets see... Yuske got brown eyes, Koenma... i can't think of any more... Genki's, like, blue or something, Boton's defintly blue, Kuramas green, hiei red, kurobara's got little black ones, i think Muroku got one blue eye, Yami's blind so we don't have to think 'bout him... main charector with brown eyes... i give up, you tell me. (this all was my ingenuce plan to get you to update[ no e-mail]) - 0.o
armygundamgirl 2008-02-26 ch 2,	abuseI'm pretty sure you've given up on this given the last time it was updated, but I like it a lot and hope that you've just gotten stuck. I really can't scold you for not updating though, as I haven't updated any of my stories in quite a while. :)
momocolady 2008-02-20 ch 2,	abusegood story
Sangfroid 2006-11-05 ch 2,	abuseWell, your bio page, updated July something-or-other, says that this story isn't abandoned, so I'm not going to let the fact that it hasn't been updated in a year stop me from adding you to my author alert. I am rather addicted to Harry Potter/Any Kind Of Anime crossovers, and Yu Yu Hakusho ones are my favorites. No, I take that back. GOOD Yu Yu Hakusho ones are my favorites- and this is one of those. There are a few little convention things to watch out for (though I hardly expect you to change them- after all, it's been a year) which I'm really only pointing out because I like to submit a well-rounded review. After a while, "OMG YUR STRY IS LIK AMAZING" can get a bit annoying. "Demons, -as you know- have not been sighted in Britain since the time of Grindewald, or at least that was the case until recently." - That should either be "Demons- as you know- have not been sighted..." or "Demons, as you know, have not been sighted." It's probably just a typo, but you've got a comma and a dash there. "Botan was not very specific ‘a long holiday’ hardly gave any clues as to where they were actually going." - You need some punctuation after "Botan was not very specific" and before "'a long holiday'". Either a colon or a dash- both would work. It feels a bit rushed without it. "Kurama blushed with warm embarrassment, “that’s alright Mother, I have my own money, you don’t need to give me any.”" - You make the same mistake twice here- once in the next sentence. 'that's' should be capitalized: even though it's not after the end of a sentence, it's at the beginning of another. And the following made me incredibly happy: "...unlike most mortals imagine the place of their afterlife; in fact, the lavish palace..." YAY FOR PROPER SEMI COLON USE. Most people (myself included) have a strong tendency to forget that our happy little semi-colon friend exists. Overall a fantastic story, and I only pointed out punctuation things (mistakes that, a year later, you probably don't make any more) because I'm a bored little child. You say that this story isn't abandoned, and I'm going to take your word for it. It's far better than thinking that somehow an HP/YYH crossover with so much promise could go to waste.
hittocerebattosai 2006-09-01 ch 1,	abuse...Evil, evil person... pokeths Oh. I was just re-reading this again, seeing as you STILL haven't updated. ...It's been ten months hasn't it? pouts I can't review chapter two twice, so here I am! blinks and stares at the end of the second chapter Katakana is spelt katakana not katacana. Yep. Hiragana, katakana, and kanji. pokeths
Wraith 2006-02-16 ch 2, anon.	abuseLove it, keep going.
hittocerebattosai 2005-12-15 ch 2,	abuseWRITE WRITE WRITE~! please?
whitehound 2005-11-01 ch 2,	abuseHello pet. This is amusing and well-done - I especialy like the recursive joke whereby the ancient toddler is complaining about how he is being portrayed in the story! Three minor quibbles: "and bore greying pink hair" makes her sound as if she's carrying her hair in a basket rather than growing it. "Bore" is not a good word here. "However, if wards were to be reinforced at the ministry it would take more time. Since there are no anti-demon seals at all in the relatively new building that the core of our society is housed in." There's something very wrong here - either one long sentence has been cut into two, or the second sentence is missing a clause. "The plant wielder swept a few locks of long red hair away his surprisingly feminine face" - prob. meant "away from."
whitehound 2005-11-01 ch 1,	abuseHello witchling. I think this reads very well so far - nicely descriptive without being over-written - though I did spot two typoes. Yer've got "Privit" where yer should have "Privet," and "deducted" where you mean "deduced."
kit-kit 2005-10-22 ch 2, anon.	abusenice you must update
Blackrose Kitsune 2005-10-21 ch 2,	abuseLovely follow up chapter. Considering the nature of this crossover, it seems fitting that Genkai and Dumbledore would be in correspondence with one another. The letter was great, by the way. You portrayed them all very well (especially Genkai), though I also liked how you said Hiei had incinerated his cell phone-too funny, too plausible. Koenma's incompetance is very believable, and his attitude is to be expected, let's just hope he gets to following Gekai's order soon, ne? Well, see you next chapter then. And kudos for using japanese. Blackrose
Paksennarion 2005-10-10 ch 1, anon.	abuseWas it Yusuke watching? He has brown eyes. That's all I can think of unless it was some evil person. Update soon. ^_^
Mikutalla 2005-10-10 ch 1,	abuseHey, just saying that I really like the story so far! Can't wait for the next chapter!
kit-kit 2005-10-09 ch 1, anon.	abusenice chapter i can't wait for the next one
Blackrose Kitsune 2005-10-08 ch 1,	abuseVery intriguing. I'm eager to find out what happens in the next chapter. You left off at the perfect spot, sets the momentum for the next chapter. Although I'm usually not to interested in crossovers, recently there have been some good ones, so I'll give this a a chance. Eagerly awaiting the next installment. Blackrose

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