This story was sort of eerie to me; I recently received a letter somewhat like this about myself. It was from a very shy, very_fragile_friend who I had no idea had been harboring feelings for me. When I discovered your piece, therefore, it seemed to me that I must read it. I found the sentiment beautiful and relevant...but of course I am biased.

Now, to provide some constructive criticism. I like how you've chosen to connect the paragraphs by using the sentence "Please don't worry about me" throughout the story. However, for the purpose of establishing continuity, it's only necessary to repeat the sentence two or three times; to place it at the end of each paragraph is a little redundant, even in such a small piece. (Of course, this is a small criticism...mere nitpicking, really.) Aside from a few spelling errors, that was really all I saw.

I felt that you accurately captured Shion's complex character in this sweet, genuine piece. It's good work overall.

Thank you for reviewing me.

Awesomness. That came out really well. You should write one based on another character. To write a note was a good idea for a story. Great job! ^_^

Aw, sweet!!

BlueTrillium, you pulled the words right out of my mouth. As for what another reviewer said about Shion being OOC-they were right, for Shion's such a stuck-up, snooty (explanative)...in both Ep 1 and Ep 2...

This was beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. I really wish Shion felt like this about Allen.

Heh. Cute. Though it's a little OOC for Shion... Or is it? You really can't get a feel for what that girl is thinking. I like the idea though. Good work.

:)

Now, if they'd just put some of that in the game...well, maybe in Episode I...

Yes. Freaking yes.

Love it eternally.

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