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| The-Erotic-Marshmellow 2006-11-06 ch 1,  | abusei understand it's been awhile since you posted this, but please, please update soon? i really want to know where this is going!! Please? |
| SiniseLuvr 2006-03-05 ch 1, | abuseomg please continue with this! This was so cute! |
| Nikki 2005-11-18 ch 1, anon. | abuseUm... we're still waiting for the next chapter. I'll whine again. I need to know, does he say it with pasta or is on to the next option? |
| londsay 2005-10-12 ch 1, | abuseheh, i usually dont like danny/mac stories, but this one's good! you left us on the edge of our seats! lol, please dont take to long to update |
| bluepenreader 2005-10-11 ch 1, | abuseOkay - that's funny! I wish you hadn't skimmed over the part where they were in bed together - inquiring minds wanna know how they got there! I'm looking forward to more! Just a couple of small points: First, you injected the narrator into the story early on ("Let me start the story for you...) - will the narrator have a part to play later? If not, you might wish to rethink using that phrase. Second, you switched tenses (briefly!!) in one paragraph. Small quibbles, really, in face of an enjoyable fic. |
| Nikki the Reader 2005-10-11 ch 1, | abuseThis was great. Poor Danny. Concussed and he still hasn't figured out how to tell Mac. If you're still looking for a beta, I volunteer. :) |
| Secret4eyes 2005-10-11 ch 1, | abuseAw. This is so cute! Me likey a lot. I've never really got my head around Danny/Mac pairings, but let's see if you can change my mind. 'Say it with Pasta'. I love that. Update soon please! |
| fruitbat00 2005-10-11 ch 1, | abuseNice very nice I'm still smilling. I can just see Danny infront of the mirror. And Flacks face as he tries to decide if Danny is concussed. So where is chapter 2...huh...were waiting... |