Windsong 2003-05-28 . chapter 1*cackles* OOh, I like this one. Or at least, I did...until the ending. I think it ends a little rushed, and...I most definitely think the fic should have been longer. Hell, if you really wanted to you could even stretch it out into a lemon; now that would have been interesting, but also not the point, and I'm digressing. The humor's great, just...work on the ending? |