OMG. YES. I love the Edward commentary. I need complete sarcasm from Edo noww. :D In other words, please continue. I love the bashing of Mary-sues, especially from in-story characters. :)

Please continue this! It's so hilarious. I laughed a lot when reading. ;D

Please continue! I love this! Edward's comments are hilarious, and sarcasm drips continuosly throughout this story. (watches the steadily dripping sarcasm).

CONTINUE IT. NOW. I COMMAND THEE.

Oh, my God, you have no idea how funny that was. xD "Excuse me. I do not 'leap.'" Priceless! xD

For the sake of humanity, CONTINUE!!

you really should continue!

yeah, you should continue. It's really funny, especially Ed's comments XD

Wow, you captured PERFECTLY what a MarySue is! Congrats!

if you totally and completely humiliate the mary-sue?
then yes. do continue. :}

Duh you should continue this! It's hilarious (ok, not as funny as the falcon story, but that was unintentional.)

I think you should add in some jack about Keiko 'just knowing things' and angsting about things, and Ed commenting to say that SHE had no right to angst, becuse blah blah blah.

Can I refer you to a fic_bitches story with Ed/Al? The commentary is GREAT. Yeah it's PWP, but... it's too pathetic to be dangerous.

Kalliel

This is so funny! I'd like to see you continue this, if only for Ed's commentary. This is definitely on my Story Alert list.

Ciao ;)

Zamnandi

^^; Ed's comments on the story are hilarious, not to metion in character. Loved the spy bit.