Since you asked!
Pretty well done. Especially for a smut fic. And you're right. vamps are too sexy for sex...huh? Did that make sense when I said it?
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Hey quite awesome this fic I've read it in adultfanfiction and it surprised me that you've moved to here O.o I loved the role you put him in this fic it very realistic (even tho I don't think he was really like that) anwyays good job and keep it up ^^

...Wow. Excellent brutality! It's not often that one can come across a fic with such vividly painted imagery as this. I love the sadism present in Raziel's personality here.

This was one of you best I agree! It was really great and ha! she died! call Razzy a bastard will you?! Btw changed my email...dont email my old addy anymore more on my profile! Love you as always!

Ha! Evilsexybastard!Raziel, I love it. I like the fact Raziel behaves like an arrogant vampire lord, and not a little goth-wannabe wussy like some people try to make him out as. Heh, there needs to be more badass vampire stories. Anyway, onto the critique.

I like your imagery. This is definitly a strong point in your writing. Lines like "Raziel looked over his shoulder, his amber eyes hazed with bloodlust, a sultry smile gracing his crimson stained lips" are so vivid, I could picture it clearly in my mind.

You have a fine grasp of grammar, thank goodness! Less and less people seem to have this. You have a strong understanding of the English language, and how to best use words to express yourself. I really "feel" the writing. Just a tiny, tiny nit-pick-- your prose is brutal but regal, and sometimes wording like "crotch" just stick out. That's only a little thing though.

The dialogue is something I have a few quibbles with though. Some sentences seem very in place with the medieval-ish setting, while other times certain times they speak, they sound fairly modern. This is a little bit jarring. Anyway, that was just a small nitpick. I find that the dialogue evens out as the story goes along. My favorite line was "Stupid girl, all love me, but that doesn't free them from their obligations." Nicely chilling!

I love your characterization of Raziel. He's so brutal, but still sultry. Your Oc was nice. Glad to see a female vampire who is not adored by everyone and hold an uber high position.

Overall, great little story! I look forward to seeing more of your writing. Also, thank you for reviewing 'The Most Fallen'. I was very flattered. Now I've read some of your writing, I'm doubly so. Feedback from skilled writers such as yourself is always needed.

Wow, Rave... that was... gory.

And there IS a difference! Listen to me and Plushie Raziel more often... :P

Love ya, babe.

I am so glad to see I'm not the only one who thinks that Raziel isn't a saint.
And I also have a soft spot for anything that involves massive bloodspilling.
In other words, I liked it only too much.

..::Twisted Sister::..