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Writingiswhatiam 2006-04-19 ch 2,	abuseHe wanted to kill us all…maybe we had killed him first I remembered how he had kept saying “He was not my friend.” He had to separate himself…he had to make sure everyone knew they weren’t alike. Because he was haunted by something darker than how Rick felt: how he felt himself. I saw it in his eyes that night; when he slammed the door…he knew it could have been him. He could’ve just as easily snapped. That part is just so incredibly well-written and perfect. Its so deep that I doubt they realize that on the show. But I see it now, the connection between Rick and Toby. Toby has been teased too, just not as bad. And I'm sure, if pushed far enough, it really could have been Toby standing there with the gun on Emman and Sean and Rick. I admire your writing. Would you mind reading my story? Its called Save Me. Thanks. Jasmine
Writingiswhatiam 2006-03-30 ch 1,	abuseOh my god. This is so good...I'm blown away. Wow.
PinkTribeChick 2005-10-16 ch 2,	abuseAnother awesome chapter! Glad you're making this a long story - it's so good! Again - keep up the great work, and more soon please! 8~D
xkissxkissx 2005-10-16 ch 2,	abuseI like the way you tie up loose ends with Manny. Keep writing! I love it!
idontknowanything 2005-10-16 ch 2,	abuseThis was a great chapter -- I'm glad it wasn't a one-shot. I like how you are dealing with Emma's character -- it seems very real, and really get's the emotions across. I think your dialogue is pretty realistic, also. Keep up the great work.
Evablue 2005-10-14 ch 1,	abuseI don't stop to review as often as I should but after reading this I couldn't not take the time. This was very, very powerful. That is pretty amazing considering the amount of words you used probably totals under 600. You were very careful to use just the right word in all of the right places. It made every word seem signifigant and gave more meaning to each sentence. Also, you truly captured Emma post-TSS in this. I could feel her emptiness, her contemplation of how everything had happened and what it meant for those left with the aftermath. There were some truly powerful lines, as well. I reall loved this segment: "He scratched out, “Look at me. Look at me!” And when she finally did he told her, “I wouldn’t really kill you. It’s so much better when they kill themselves.” I want to say again: maybe that’s how Rick felt. All I think about now is “Maybe that’s how Rick felt.” I thought that was a very clever way to get some interesting thoughts and points across. The idea that Rick meant to leave them in a state of dying without being dead is so interesting. Also, the comparison between Toby and Rick was perfect. I've never really seen that insight put out there before but the way you wrote it made sense. The only criticism I have is there are a few spelling and grammar errors. I'll be watching to see what you come up with next.
rememberese 2005-10-14 ch 1,	abuseThe way I saw it, Rick had it easy. The bullet took less than five seconds to kill him. Toby, Sean, and I…we were all still dying because of that bullet. That was my favorite part. I loved this, definitely continue to write, because I want to read more :')
PianoChick36 2005-10-13 ch 1,	abuseThat was just...WOW. It was so deep and well written...what made you think of it? It's really really really good! Continue to write more-you have talent! Awesome POV!! Update Soon!
idontknowanything 2005-10-13 ch 1,	abuseThis was a very good, but rather short one shot. I liked it a lot. I felt you did a nice job with the characters emotions, and dealt with her haunted aspect very well. It was an interesting read, but it could have been a little bit longer.
PinkTribeChick 2005-10-13 ch 1,	abuseWow . . . an amazingly thought-provoking and well written piece. You've touched on something that the show has glossed over since the shooting episode. The fact that Rick was bullied - that he was driven to what he did. People want to make him the bad guy - but it wasn't all his fault. And I really love how you brought up the fact that it easily could have been Toby in his shoes - because Toby is picked on a lot and has been picked on by Spinner, Jay, and Jimmy. You did a wonderful job! Keep up the great work! 8~D

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