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| Vanilla Slash 2008-04-26 ch 4,  | abuseXD Cue the drama! >. |
| rincor 2006-05-09 ch 4, anon. | abuseupdate soon, i can't wait to see where this one ends up :) other than the spelling and some grammar mistakes your stories are awesome :) keep up the good work |
| MrsCatherineGrissom 2006-01-18 ch 5, | abusePleez write more i want to know how it ends |
| countrymusicncsigirl 2006-01-17 ch 4, | abuseOMG! i think Grissom needs 2 hit Ecklie in the face several times!! Coz if Grissom doesn't then i will! i HATE Ecklie! |
| da-super-dude 2005-11-12 ch 4, | abuseUpdate soon. I want to know what kind of solution you will come up with for tis situation. A word of advice- check your spelling. It's a bit off. But otherwise it was a job well done! |
| coolcatz 2005-11-07 ch 4, | abusekeep going girl. like how you are showing how hectic cath's life is. |
| Sue 2005-11-01 ch 3, anon. | abuseConsidering the implied pedophilia, I seriously hope that you are a member of Lindsey's age group. A 12-year old girl having a crush on a 17-year old is normal, but a 17-year old guy wanting to date a 12-year old... as a criminalist Catherine is well acquainted with sexual predators and her meek admonishment is appaling: "Well I like plunty of older men its natural Linds," my mind travels to Grissom. If my caculations are correct he is only seven years older then me. How can I get angry because she likes a guy five years older then her. "But at your age you may want to stick with people near yours. The older the boy the more he wants from you Linds. Go with someone who is at the same level as you and you won't have to deal with it that much. But always remember protect yourself when ever you need to." Maybe it's a language barrier (considering the grammatical and syntactical problems in the text)? It might sound like irresponible, indifferent parenting because English is not your primary language? Then again, it doesn't quite explain why a middle aged woman would compare her own would-be love life to that of her barely pubescent daughter. A beta reader would be an excellent idea for you. S/he would tackle not only the plenthora of spelling errors, but also plotting and characterization. Sounding like a creepy advocate of child-love should be avoided entirely. Ask somebody who's older (i.e who has life experience) because it will make it easier to keep Catherine in particular in-character, and make sure that the person is a good speller. Good luck. :) |
| coolcatz 2005-10-31 ch 3, anon. | abuseyour killing me. write faster. |
| coolcatz 2005-10-23 ch 2, anon. | abusei'm so liking this right now. please continue |
| coolcatz 2005-10-15 ch 1, | abuseok, so why do you people always have to end it at a spot like this? and with ecklie watching no less! |
| D.M.A.S 2005-10-15 ch 1, | abusemean mean mean, want more NOW!... |
| Sqully 2005-10-14 ch 1, | abuseOOH OOH OOH |