I love your story!

I'm sad Sasuke died but it was a nice story anyway.

I like it alot! Are you going to continue? Please do so!

O.O

He died.

[reads again]

Props on your excellent endings, though the semicolon fragment ["his life ended"] was sort of unnecessary. I found the sequence of events somewhat confusing, yet that may be because I read too fast.

Some cliches to avoid:

Sasuke's "obsidian eyes"

I loved it so much. but the ending was so ...sniff.

This was so sad. I like how you ended it, even though Sasuke died.

a nice story... but sad one...

omg noo sasuke died, bro sakura could have healed some of the wounds he had. xDD.

really really sad *sniff sniff* but it was really good

aww soo sad...but good! keep it up!