Ha, ha. I feel badly for Dairine, she's having a difficult time with the whole royal business. I'd hate wearing heels (hence why I never do) and I feel for her frustration. Good thing Roshaun can hear her thoughts or she'd have to suffer in silence.

Oh, in one sentence you say "Spot never wheres them" I think you mean "wear," but since you use the correct word in the other setence I think it was probably a typo.

Other than that, another great chapter. I look forward to reading the rest, but right now I have to go to bed. LOL.

Best,

-Don "QuixoticQuest" ^_^

Not bad for a first YW fan fic, in fact it's way better than the my first fan fic which is in progress right now.

Let's see, I really like that you have Dairine react appropriately when she finds Roshaun, I'd have slugged him too if I was Dairine.

Your character dialogue isn't too OOC either, which is good, Roshaun can be pretty difficult to write dialogue for and so can Roshaun's parents too (especially given the situation he's returning under).

Then you've got your own spin on the original story which just tops off the nicely made ice cream sundae you've got here.

Nice work!

-Don "QuixoticQuest" ^_^

Aw. That was so sweet. I knew I shouldn't have started reading such a long fic so late at night, and now it's practically morning, but it was definitely worth it. One of the best Dairine/Roshaun fics I've seen. I approve wholeheartedly.

I love this line! "Her face went from green to red faster than a traffic light." Although it made me wonder if her face turned yellow in between. :P

In other news, dang, I am commenting a lot! I rarely review more than the last chapter. But there are so many lines that I just feel the need to repeat for some reason.

Wait... there've been four presidents assasinated. Don't forget about poor Garfield and McKinley. :)

I have a delightful image in my head now of a laptop bouncing on the bed. =D And one of Dairine failing at high heels.

I also love the line about knock your chips off. And that Dairine had to explain it. Although you said "spot doesn't where socks" instead of "wear". (Also a typo near the end, where "slow" is spelled "slwo".)

And pretty much this entire chapter. I have high hopes for the rest of this fic.

I like this fic a lot. This is the only d/r fic over 30,0 words long!

very good

I love this pairing so much!
I love this fic, too, it does a good job of making it believable

I could scream at the awesomeness! :) I lurve the whole story.

Wow! I love this story. So amazing! Great job! :)

I really liked this story, it was well written, interesting, and not overdone make out scenes every 4 lines. =D

I LOVE LOVE LOVE THIS STORY!
Though I kind of wish that they told eachother how they feel... but it is still really good. They are so kind to eachother. You're a really good writer.

AW YES ! this is realy good ..must read more

Oh!!
This was very, very, very well done.
There were a couple of grammatical mishaps, but I really like the story.
It wasn't too mushy.
It was realistic and very accurate.
Kudos to you!