That's too bad this was a one-shot. It was an interesting idea. One that I would have like to see continue.

This was nicely written by the way. It makes me curious how disastrous the last attempt (your debut) was, as you say.

The breast joke was funny. They usually are. Great job.

ok. i get it better now. but, is this going to be a one shot? or... not? cause, it's left really REALLY open ended. awesome thought. i understand better. good job.

I like it. :) Hope there's more to it, even if it is a one-shot.

Not my real name, but it is the one I used last time. I understood it a lot better this time, but it still makes an odd one-shot. Then again, I suppose if you wanted to write a continuation, this would be a good starting point. All-in-all, not bad for a short one-shot. It's a pretty interesting spin on Slayers.

Not my real name, but it is the one I used last time. I understood it a lot better this time, but it still makes an odd one-shot. Then again, I suppose if you wanted to write a continuation, this would be a good starting point. All-in-all, not bad for a short one-shot. It's a pretty interesting spin on Slayers.

Hmn...I know nothing about the series, but it seems good. At least the writing part is...grammar and all that. So yeah...
Sayonara

~~Silv~~

Confusion is still there on my part Mei, but that's because I don't read/watch Slayers...but the people who do will understand. ^^" Anyhoo...I still like it though...really I do.