i like your story i can't wait to read the next part good luck
wing hope
p.s i'm crap at review
sorry for being short

I like it, nice cliff hanger. I do agree with Digital Rebel though, it was a little quick, needs a tad more description ya know...the stuff English teachers lecture about in school.

However, I hate putting downers on reviews cuz this ain't a story to flame but a one I hope to read more of! Please update soon!

Potato Lover X2006

I hope you continue the story, it's very interesting and I like the plot of it! Thank you for making this a non yaoi Duo fic, I really needed this! -> tired of seeing only yaoi GW fics. Keep up the good work!

Hey, it's me again. I hope you continue to write more stories on this topic. I also hope to see in the future a Howl's Moving Castle story from you. Keep up the good work!

This story was exemplary! It was classic, and yet wild. I loved the suspense! It had a very nice steady pace to it.

Nice, but I think this story is moving a bit too fast. You should give some more background information and work on being descriptive, in both senses. As in, describing the setting and characters as well as their emotions and actions.

Also, when introducing characters, you should stick their age in with their description. When you introduced both Ara and Duo, you told us their age but not what they look like. So, you could try either sticking it in with their descriptions or introducing it more discreetly, so as not to place too much emphasis on this detail and make it seem more important then the rest of their description (because it shouldn't be).

Either way, I like how you stuck Hilde in there. Some drama and jealousy never hurt anyone... except the characters, but they exist to be our puppets.

Anyway, I'm sorry if I sound like a picky brat. I just can't help critiquing. It's in my blood and all that. I'm saying this in good feelings, and I hope it helps you with your writing. :)

Hey, this sounds cool! (sorry if this isn't much *blushes* I just don't know what to say)

sure thing! i'll be waiting for that update though! hehehe. hope your family things get better . .if that makes any sense!

m.s.

very cute!! some gramatical errors, but nothing to fret about!