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Stinger - VXR42 2006-04-09 ch 2,	abuseIt's a good idea, but it's amatuerly written, with little in-depth descriptio and next to no emotive language at all. Try and be more poetic/artistic on the description for example: Vinny Parole was a thief, your classic, mafia thief. He was a hyena in his early twenties, taller than Sly, always wearing a business suit, and never late. He had tan fur with dark brown spots on his back and neck. You’ll learn more about him later, all you need to know right now is he and Sly had been good friends since they were sixteen. Vinny and Sly sat at a table in one of Sly’s many mansions. Vinny loved to hear about the gangs adventures, and never got bored of one of their stories. He visited Sly often, but the visits were often short, or cut short. Still, Vinny visited them to check up, and hear about their escapades. Why couldn't you have had: In one of the many mansions that Sly Cooper owned, a hyena was lounging in a chair, listening to the famous raccon retell his latest daring story again. The twenty-something italian thief ran a hand through his dark tan headfur, carresessing the brown spots on his back, anxiously making sure his suit was, as always, impeccably tailored. In addition to his exquisite taste in suits, Vincent Parole wan never, ever late. His visits with Sly were usually short, or they were cut short thanks to the arrival of the police on the scene or other such problems. The hyena and Sly had been great friends since they were sixteen, and as such Sly was one of the few people who could call him 'Vinnie'. I'm not trying ot say this is bad, but it could do with some serious work. It has promise though, so I hope you can correct all this.
Goddess of Thieves 2006-02-27 ch 2,	abusenods head interesting, interesting, i really like where this is going. update soon and ill review!
Eveningbreeze of SkyClan 2005-11-15 ch 2,	abuseSecond strange death? What, Bruno wasn't good enough? Lol, just kidding. Ok, this is a good story, but I'm addicted to Stalkers 1 and 2 now, so continue with Stalker 2. Don't forget about this potential gem, cuz it could get as good as Stalker. Mebbe. Ratchet out.
Eveningbreeze of SkyClan 2005-11-15 ch 1,	abuseAnd ya know THAT'S gonna leave a mark. Ratchet out.
CocoaMoo Vamp. 2005-11-02 ch 2,	abuseCool. Keep up the great work! I'm keeping it on my Alert list! {waits patiently for the next chapter}
All-knowing Alien 2005-10-20 ch 2,	abuseHmm...and now what tragic death shall befall this Vinny?
Eliza Spencer 2005-10-19 ch 2,	abuseHey, cool story. Parole means word in Italiano...
Heiduska 2005-10-19 ch 2,	abusesniff poor Sly :( and the Gang. You always make me cry :( sniff Ohh stalkerII? Wow! :DD And like I told you to do a sequel! :D So, I'm off to read that first chappie! Heiduska
Sgt. Ace Cooper 2005-10-18 ch 2,	abuseI think your just trying to make me cry... hm... O-well I'll take Stalker 2 over anything. I can't stop thinking about the first story. mumbles i still wanted 7 days Wah! Holla At CHa PS:I'll get you and your little dog too MWHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! (lol)
DivineGuardian 2005-10-18 ch 2, anon.	abuseHi Dragon nice story so far I'm a MAJOR SlyXCarmelita fan so you're OC had better be good.Can't wait for the next Chap+I'm holding out for StalkerII 'till next time Divine one out
Shadowthunder 2005-10-18 ch 2,	abuseive tried writing before, and it never works out. i always quite haflway through and never get back to it.nice chapter. will Vinny be killed? guess we just have to wait.
GirlNextDoor228 2005-10-18 ch 2,	abuseThis is cool. Keep writting!
Sgt. Ace Cooper 2005-10-17 ch 1,	abuseQuality crap...I like that. You mean Dragon I wanted 7 Days later and I want it NOW! *Crys like a little girl without her fav. doll O-well Much love to the fic and your work Keep on written playa Holla At Cha
Shadowthunder 2005-10-17 ch 1,	abusehey. pretty good. way better than anything i could write. im puttin u and ur story on my favorites.
Heiduska 2005-10-17 ch 1,	abuseEWW! He isn't dead is he? But on your fics people die so... I wouldn't count on that he will be alive. Thanks for answering that last review I gave you :D Update soon!

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