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| Cascaper 2008-05-09 ch 2,  | abuseOk, now THAT is awesome! "But there was something odd about my apology...I was forgiven before I made it." That sentence is just perfect. Perfect I tell you. |
| Cascaper 2008-05-09 ch 1, | abuseOk, now here's an instance where repetition works. It ties all the notes together at the same time it makes them individual by the adjective following that same opening sentence. This is cool! |
| Tumble Bandit 2007-09-02 ch 3, | abuseAwesome story! The first chapter was very different, but i really liked it! With the next chapters, very, very cute! I think you have done a very good job... keep up the good work! |
| Adi Sagestar 2007-07-11 ch 3, | abuseSweet. |
| Jezlia 2005-12-26 ch 1, anon. | abuseThat was REALLY powerful! It was sort of odd at first, but WOW, it really sank in and made an impression of feelings. GOOD job! |
| -Demia- 2005-10-19 ch 3, | abuseInteresting... Well, I certainly liked it. But it was short. Short but good |
| Magister Adoro 2005-10-18 ch 1, | abuseHmm, interesting format for fan fiction, cool! You'd make a certain English teacher proud! |
| Sleeping Tiger 2005-10-17 ch 3, | abuseWow, forget what I said earlier about shortness, this was really short, lol! But all in all, it was cute. I liked it. |
| Sleeping Tiger 2005-10-17 ch 2, | abuseIt's not often I get to see Electra and Misto together! Old Deueteronomy's entire birthday was just a sham to get the two together...but it worked, lol. Misto seemed to be hardly the heart-broken type. I like your pacing...you don't use alot of description, but it's just enough, in my opinion. And though the chapters aren't long, alot seems to happen. Interesting. |
| Sleeping Tiger 2005-10-17 ch 1, | abuseOkay,that first chapter was...poetic, to say the least. Am I right in assuming that the older cats call Misto by Quaxo? Cause I was a little perterbed until I saw who was calling him that. And you spelled Jemima's name wrong. Heh, you should have called the chapter "The air was cold that night". It was very poetic, i think. But I just wonder why Electra tells Misto, and everyone in the tribe knows? Word gets around, lol. On to next chapter... |