Great story and I like you planned plot it would have very iinteresting story good job and thanks!

Not a bad basis for a fic.

Unfortunately, it was plagued from beginning to end with an OOC 'Emo' Ranma that had an obsession with Akane's happiness. Nothing else mattered but Akane's happiness, period.

Kasumi lacked any kind of conviction, seemingly casting everything she'd said about Akane needing to learn a lesson and grow up...simply because Akane 'raped', NOT seduced, Ranma. Guess Kasumi was just deluding herself about thoughts of marriage. As she was not shown to display any displeasure at Akane's actions, one can assume that she's perfectly willing to give back Akane's punching-bag and new sex-toy.

The same can pretty much be said for Nabiki. She's angry, but apparently not about to upset Little Princess Akane by any attempt to stake her own claim.

And of course, Ranma could care less about anyone other than Akane. Sure, he'd like them as 'friends', but only that.

It started with a good premise, and looked to actually be going somewhere... But with this chapter, it makes everything appear to have been nothing more than a plot by Happosai, Kasumi and Nabiki to force Ranma and Akane to the next level in 'their' relationship (despite any "Author's Notes" to the contrary).

::chuckles:: Quite the story. Sometimes stories go off in their own direction whether we want them to or not. Sometimes it's a good thing, sometimes not so good.

As for stories getting blackballed and stuff, there will always be folks who don't like what you write, who don't like what you read, who don't like how you review. Always. All one can do is leave the children to squabble and move on.

I liked this story. Thanks for sharing.

Great story!

Hilarious, but the lack of resolution bugs me a little. It seems like he should still end up with Kasumi if anyone based on how things worked out.

I vaguely remember reading a couple of things that were similar to this. The first one was a total lemon, where everything was focused on the sex, but the other one is what really seemed familiar. It was some crossover story with Ranma and Sailor Moon, and Happy used the point (pressure point, not burning) on Tuxedo Mask. I wish I could remember what that story was, as I'm pretty sure it was really funny. Oh well.

While I want to say 'good job' on this, I'm really not happy with how it ended. Ideally, Ranma and Kasumi would have stayed together with the possibility of Nabiki as well (either as a permanent member, or a temp friends-with-benefits) or just for a while until she found someone else. This really seemed to end with Ranma somewhat getting back together with Akane, which is lame, especially with how beaten up Ranma was afterward (with no signs of having enjoyed it)...

All i have to say is LEMON'S please. Make some chapter's with lemony goodness.

poor Ranma he ain't no pervert!

I believe that this story was a god among fanfics. Although it didn't get me going like "Twilight" it is a work of art.

Well that was a very abrupt and stunning ending... didn't see that coming. I mean sure you could think Akane might have come back to Ranma but to come in and essentially rape him? That and she likes it rough, damn! Well... I'm not gonna say this was a good or bad fic. It was different... I don't so much like Ranma Akane pairings. But, at least it wasn't a Ranma Shampoo those are as bad as Ranma Kodachi.

Funny story

Really nice fic... too bad its short. Liked everything bout it except the last chapter... probably because i don't like Ranma with Akane... and prefer Kasumi or Nabiki. Hope you make a sequel without Ranma/Akane... if it is, i probably won't read it... oh well... it was a good short read...

Good stuff. I think your writing has improved a fair bit, that's the impression I'm getting from my memories of earlier readings.

The chapters were all good except for this one. Chapter 10 should be the worst OOC I have ever read. It could have been a much more interesting story, but this story fails to amuse me. Akane's personality falls much below her original character. Despite her violent temper and tomboy character, she is a good, positive, sweet girl and would never, I repeat, NEVER do something to personally and intimatly harm someone else in any way.

The other chapters were good 8/10s, but chapter 10 is horribly done, the only good thing is the grammar, and of course drama is needed in a regular story, but you musn't ruin the character's personality, which is a fatal wound to your story.

I am not flaming I promise, but this story needs some bad fixing. Overall, including the Akane rash, I give the story 4/10.

Have a good day

A sequel sounds good, but I'm pretty dissapointed with the way the story 'fellout' as you put it. This still remains one of my favorite Ranma fics though. I'll be checking out those new stories you posted now. I'm hoping to see your excellent quality of writing in those stories as well.