FanFiction.Net - unleash your imagination
| FanFiction.Net - unleash your imagination |
|
| Home Just In Communities Forums Beta Readers Dictionary Search | Login Register Extras |
| ShelleyAmberRules 2008-04-11 ch 1,  | abuseThis poem is very sweet. I loved it very much. |
| Muslix 2008-03-12 ch 1, | abusethat was a very pretty poem :) it kind of felt like silk, if you know what i mean its very flowy |
| Ceresava 2005-10-25 ch 1, anon. | abuseHeh, great poem. "Pretty young thing, wide open face." Taken directly from the making of CATS feature, no? I love that description of her. |
| Fearful Little Thing 2005-10-19 ch 1, | abuseYou were going so well! So very well! Until that line didn't rhyme... I was so disappointed. If the next line after "face" had rhymed, I would have been glad to take back every single thing I'd said about your poems so far. Well, you do have a tendancy to throw in some really good lines amongst the generic, I'll give you that. I personally dont care what anyone else has said, you need work on your 'visualisation'. ie; your focus on the purely physical aspects of the character. You have one style of writing that you're comfortable with (from what I can see) and you stick to that. I can almost predict the next poem. Let's say it's about Cassandra; Sleek brown fur. I am Egyptian. The Pharoahs call to me from across the years. Silky chocolate. I have brown fur. |
| -Demia- 2005-10-19 ch 1, | abuseBetter than my attempts at cats poems |
| Sleeping Tiger 2005-10-18 ch 1, | abuseWhile I can only wonder what the end of your summary was supposed to say, as I'm sure it was directed to me -_- I think this was a very good poem. I never thought of comparing her to a dove, and personally i first thought white=Victoria, but I can definitely see it as Jemima now. You've converted me, lol. You have a knack for poetry, I couldn't write my way out of a paper back if I was asked to do poetry. Kudos. This poem is laden with the colors white and gold in almost every line, which makes it interesting when you think of the Jemima from the video. You envision her colors contrasted against the white and gold. Then if you think of the Golden Sillabub in Japan, it makes it breath-taking. At least in my humble opinion. |
| Magister Adoro 2005-10-18 ch 1, | abuseWow! You're good! |