You should learn the difference between "your" and "you're", which is really very basic English and an annoying error that will put off plenty of readers. Also, putting lots of line breaks in a stream of consciousness doesn't automatically make poetry. Not absolutely horrible, though.

As a fan of Gormenghast and Fuchsia I have to say you have captured the character perfectly as you do in all your work.

Wonderful poem. I think you really captured Fuchsia's problems.

very well written. I enjoyed reading it keep writtng you have to much tallent to waste.