hey, i like it. You should write some more

It's really good but I'm a "little" clueless since i only watched the first ten or so episodes of the first season. the place I stopped was the part when Charlie had just come back from almost getting hung by Ethan. Truely I love your story!

I love your story it's really good and I can't wait to see what becomes of Charlie! Please update

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I'm really enjoying this. It's very exciting. It's a scenario I've always wanted to see--Charlie being sorely tempted by the drugs shortly after he found them. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Please write more. Oh, and if you'd like to check out my Charlie fic, it's called We Live In Deeds. I also have a Charlie character study called Metamorphosis. I would love some feedback. Thanks and keep writing!

I liked it alot! But PLEASE update soon!

For your first fic, it has alot of potential. My only real complaint is that the chapters are too short and a bit undescriptive. Most sentences start off rather bluntly like: Charlie got up. Sun looked at the fire. Claire held Aaron. It sort of makes reading it too easy so you end up skimming it and get bored. The concept and plot is really interesting though and if you keep writing and practicing, this will turn into something really brilliant!

This is actually a small continuation to my review for chapter 4 but it doesn't let you review twice. It's Locke, not Lock. Just look on or whatever it is in America for any names.

You do realise that most people hate it when people threaten to stop stories if they don't get enough reviews? But heck, the story's worth a review anyway. I was a little confused by things but I'm British and haven't seen nearly as far ahead as people getting into the hatch yet so that'd be why. Great suspense building with the monster chasing Charlie and you kept well with the style of the show- never actually seeing the monster, just running away from it. At least that's how it stands as far as I've seen, episode 22. You've put over Charlie's temptation well as well. It's good when you're building suspense to dart back and forth between scenes, but not when you're not. It'd be better in some places to just have bigger bits in each place and stop jumping around so much as it takes a few seconds for the reader to re-orientate themself with the situation in each place, which is good when building panic, but not good for general use. So carry on and carry on quick, but don't blackmail people into reviewing. No one likes it and you'll lose readers not win them in the long run.

Please continue it! My comp says there's a chapter 5 but then says system error ¬_¬. I love this story! It's so good!

your story is really good! plz continue! Locke.

Very very good - I'm enjoying the adventure! I find myself saying "Now what's going to happen?" You've captured the characters well. Good job! I look forward to reading more. Keep it coming!

Hey! I really like your story! Keep going please. I mean there's no way you can just end it there! Keep writing, it's great!

It's Locke, and I think that's what you've been using the whole time...I think...Well anyway, good chapter! Can't wait to find out if Charli's gonna take the drugs or not- after all he's in a plane full of them...

plz update i love your story you should amke charlie get hurt like really bad