I really think this is a fic worth continuing. Ash is an awesome character with her own flaws and that's what makes her interesting. Please take this sincere review into consideration!

Short little bit here, been quite a while since I've seen something like that from you (sort of refreshing in a way). Very effective though, shows the two sides nicely and does the suspense well too. Anyways, nice job so far, keep up the good work.

~avel follet

Still going nicely, Kayla. Moves the story along well enough...has me wondering what Ash is going to end up doing. Anyways, nice job, just a few little typos and such (though it's good to see the division working).

~Avel F.

good chapter i will keep reading this, you are certainly one of the more talented writed for redwall oin fanfication, give longer review later

grubswiper~

Ah...so it's not quite the sort of flight I originally had in mind (I was thinking self-powered/mechinical sorts, though that could be a bit complex for Redwallian tech), but this still sounds interesting enough.

At this point I'm wondering whether this story will have much in terms of action and villians or if this will be focused more upon the (for lack of a better word) human aspect. Honestly I think I'd prefer the latter since I dunno how the former would work (save for challenges of the journey). Gareth sounds as though he could certainly be an interesting character...kind of has the whole dragon-rider sort of thing going (in the good way of course).

Anyways, nice job with this so far. May wish to add in some defined breaks (with dashes or something) to help the formatting, but other then that this is still going pretty well (may wish to watch the transitions as well).

Nice fic so far.

~avel

Y'know, when I had originally looked at The Impossible Dream, this is actually what I though of initially. I've always wanted to see somebody do this (almost started one, but it got pushed to the background of a different plot), so I'm very glad to see it getting some life as far too few of these sorts of stories seem to exist. Anyways, nice job so far, I like how you started off relatively normal before dumping the actual story on us. It really sets up the world well, gives it a contrast that makes everything gel so much better.

Awesome start, Kayla.

~avel