Ok I read a bit more into your story and It looks really good. You make the young characters in the story talk like young kids in these days which is nice to see somthing really fresh, at first it annoyed me but I like how new it seems.

Ok I just want to offer a few nots of constructive critism -not flaming- I read this chapter and it took me a while to follow what was going on, you should really put a paragraph in between when two characters talk, so mix ups don't happen. Other than that I havent finished reading the first chapter but the general plot looks very nice and interesting can't wait to read it.

awsome story, i love it so far. Link and Zelda are so damn cute together in this fic XD

Gah, I'm so sorry it took me so long to review. My evil internet has been playing up but EXCUSES DO NOT EXCUSE! A fabulous chapter as always, but I must state my worry about these current events.

A WAR! AN ARRANGED MARRIAGE! TO RUTO!
Dear oh dear, what has happened in my absence? I almost long for Malon to return (almost). Well, Link and Zelda better get a clue REAL QUICK, or they are heading for some major trouble.

Return to us soon with another fabulous chapter!
Muchos luv,

*Silverpistola*

This is a great story, keep it up!

But I do want to know something, are you putting Ganondorf in this story? I strongly advise not to. \

8/10-really cool

My Lord! You finally update after 500 years of waiting.

Ohh, dear.

Stupid, stupid Link! Stupid!

Give me the next chapter. Now!

this is a great story up-date soon!

Please write more I really like your story and would be mucho sad if you didn't continue it. I don't have any ideas for you though,sry. But pls think of something!ahem, pls

Okay, firstly, WELCOME BACK RIVER DRAGON. Secondly, AWESOME, YET SHORT, CHAPTER.

Now, I've given it some thought and here are a range of ideas:

1. Zelda's Father catches her with Link and forbids her to see him again!
2. Zelda kills Malon in an excruciatingly painful manner.
3. One of Link or Zelda's parents suggests an arranged marriage!
4. Zelda kills Malon in an excruciatingly painful manner involving the use of a mallet.
5. Wrap it up with a good old everyone lived happily ever after.
6. Zelda kills Malon in an excruciatingly painful manner involving a mallet and ELECTRICITY.
7. Malon tries to sabotage Zelda and Link's blossoming relationship and then dies.

So, I hope that's helpful and I beg thee to continue.
Muchos luv,
*silverpistola*

haha to tell the truth, i wasn't even sure if u were ever going to continue this. first time i read it (i dont even know how long ago that was) it was alread at chapter 9, and it had been a while sence u'd last updated it. i understand that you're running out of ideas, but i guess i should say that i like how its going. yea, that and malon needs to get out a bit more if she wants to find someone for her. and nabooro needs to find someway to avoid war with hyrule, seeing how their last meeting turned out.

haha awesome! a great unique angle on the hylians, don't you think?

Malon is stupid enough to think Zelda would still be HER friend?! Ha! Dream on Ginger!

A fantastic chapter. I would rave about it all day, but I have more pressing concerns. Forgive me.

*Begins letter*
To whom it may concern.
I am the guardian of the world and ruler of all that is good and righteous. I order you not to give River Dragon ANY MORE HOMEWORK EVER! If you decide to disobey me, you will be cursed with bad hair days, FOR THE REST OF YOUR LIFE.
Yours most charmingly,
*silverpistola*

*didn't notice this chapter untill done reveiwing the last one* ...Well...I forgive you ^_^ You anwsered most of my questions. Soo...*ahem* another great chapter and...you better not have TOO much homework! *shakes fist* ^.^

Tch. A short chapter AND a cliffie? I am offically mad at you. XO UPDATE! It's no fair you don't update in forever and then you give a teaser! TT_TT WAAHH! Who was the woman? What is Zelda gonna do about Malon? Why am I asking all these questions if you are gonna update, right?