Ignoring your note about that English is not your first language, I've enjoyed your first chapter.

I hope Sakura toughens up, I don't like seeing her portrayed as such a cry baby. Thank God you've paired her with Itachi, because if she was going after Sasuke to be with Sasuke instead of getting caught up with someone else...it would be gagging and not a story for me.

However, you mention Itachi and I'm all over it, like white on rice.

loophole left a strong impression on my mind that it continues to butt in but you've built up a separate storyline on your own that obviously has nothing to do with that universe.

however, deidara seems to ring false. he would never be that emotional(yes, i know he's young) and the main story that sakura broke out for sasuke.

what does she think is going to happen ? he didnt want her along, he doesnt want her there. even without knowing further manga events, that much is pretty obvious from the time skip itself. your sakura is an idiot.

i am not blaming you but i think your's and lady hanaka's story- ripple in the pond are much too same... 1st of all her friendship towards deidra... reason of their friendship, then kisame's attitude itachi's demeanor all are the same somewhat plot also... sakura is in love with sasuke but slowly her affliction towards itachi increase as he abducted sakura as the bait for kyubi.. and describing akatsuki somewhat- HUMAN... it just like i am reading the remix of the ripples in the pond

but on the indiviual ground... your's expressions are good your grammer is impressiove...

Aww omgosh! Itachi is just so perfect in this thank you! :) you you great vocab and I loved the characters. They're so accurate!

awsome write more

:P

Thank you so much for the great story :)

even though i would also like sasosaku pairing, but Deisaku and Itasaku are narrated so good that makes me to keep reading it. Hehe thanks for the hard work and hope to read more of ur stories !

-clare-

Okay, sad. Very fu*king sad. Living off the fruits and berries, having little to no sleep at all, and then as she TRIES to rest her body a 'surpise attack' out of no-where.

Loved the whole thing!

the first arc of the trilogy can be summed up in one word; fabulous. it is very promising and i immediately got excited about reading the 2nd and 3rd arc. more power to you . i hope you continue writing more fics.

sincerely yours,

elaine

aw this chapter made me cry. ur a good wrighter

Umm Deidara actually doesn't say yeah slot he actually says "Hmmm" eg: "If you say one more word Tobi, there'll be no doubt about the cause of your death, hmm?"

I like your story, I really, really do. :))

There's just this thing that's confusing me, though.

At first, Sakura was captured. And then it was said that she was bait for the Kyuubi.

Then, came a bonus, with Itachi asking her if she could heal his eyes or not. It only came later, in the story.

So why is it that it seems like the only reason that Sakura stays with the Akatsuki is to heal Itachi's eyes?

Sakura said so.

Deidara said so, too.

:)

Or maybe, I just don't really understand. But all things aside, your story is brilliant. :)

ohhh i like this story! cant wait to read the next arc! Thank you for writing this. :D

To be honest this would've of made a nice DeiSaku story :) but ItaSakus the best so stick with it :)