Very nice! It makes me want to read more of it. Watch the spelling, though. ;) Was that supposed to be a prologue or something? I noticed how it was kinda short. My chapters always end up short, too, so dont feel so bad.

Sydney

Sad and touching.

It's a very good story and conveys Chakotay's emotions very well.

WHAT? You didn't say if she woke up or not. How ddare you let her die? Why?

::really shivers:: that was AMAZING. really really good. characters were believable, storyline was believable, everything was great. very sad. had an element of truth.

So sad it hurt. At one point I literally could not breathe.

Really makes you think doesn’t it? Though not an original idea, it was well written. I liked the way you had one powerful short sentence every now again. It brought the whole piece together nicely.