sweat take that anzu hahahaha i had suger

What a perfectly well executed plan!

Love the story, Hope you'll update ASAP!

That was so great! I know what you mean about the ending part, but I think you did well. And I may be a bad person for it, but I prefer lemons to limes!

Grace

That was good and well written and also good you spotted where it fell down a bit: the ending did not quite fit right. I think from the moment they sat in the room as Yuugi blurted out the explanation to Yami it went a bit wrong, because Anzu's bit is quite a good line to end this on. Its just the way the final scene came about is a little assumed (sorry can't think of the right word lol).

Otherwise though it was a really enjoyable and amusing read...I do like these types of ideas ther's always soo much you can do with them :D and as a standalone (cause there was a number of issues that weren't given enough credit) its brill.

y'know, it was a really good ficlit, but i agree, the ending seemed like it was written by someone else, from about when Yami's POV ended, or shortly thereafter. either way it was good, you could develop the 'Girlfriend arriving to be Sherlock and getting a BIG surprise' part, but either way, it was good. waiting to see what you do.

I likey fic. I wuv Seto/Yugi/Yami. Anzu/Tea bah. Nice job.

heck yea i love anzu bashing YAOI ROCKS!

Oh my god...haha, this was really good. It made me laugh...haha, and the Anzu bashing was good, too. I really did love this!

Not bad, not bad. A few errors here and there - you want quiet instead of quite a time or two.

I liked the idea, and I liked how you gave more than one point of view. However, this might have been better if you let it play out more and stretched it so everything didn't happen so fast. It didn't seem quite as realistic as it could have been.

Don't edit! it's fantastic!

AWESOME! I LOVE THIS PAIRING! MUST FIND MORE!

hiya! WOW, you're making good progress with this story! interesting and very creative!

yknow, personally, i get grossed out (BUT not in a bad way) when i see sxyyxy. but you've really made my day! LOL, this is super funny! i *fainted* when i read this line:

"It was Yami, but certainly not the way she had expected to find him. He was shirtless, his hair was tousled, his fly was only half-zipped"

o WHOOT! fan in me acting up! HOT HOT HOT YAMI!

update please!

Frankly I like how it was written

Awesome _ Keep Writing!