nicely written.

oh wow! such poetic language here! I absolutely love the image of the newborn dragon, especially as the dragon is the symbol of the Hiten Mitsurugi..the last line is just beautiful. It's amazing how so much can be said in just a few lines! :)

Very lovely. Of emotion and truth. Just beautiful.

this is a nice snapshot, but i wonder how you can call something seven lines long a fiction. why not put the whole series into one fic as chapters?

I love fics dealing with the father/son relationship between Hiko and Kenshin :) This was very sweet... very touching. Nice job on this!

I love the power in this--the idea of the transference of the "dragon's fire" from the man to the boy. And the image of the "newborn dragon" rising, phoenix-like, from the "cradle of the 13th dragon's fire" was just masterful!

Wonderful! And here I go, right on to Adoption II...