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Yuri-hime
2009-10-18 . chapter 12
Very very good =D

This chapter shows a marked improvement in your writing style. Things no longer seemed a bit jumbled and all over the place. Now everything flowed well and it was an absolute pleasure to read. Thanks for writing! =3
ShadowCub
2009-09-22 . chapter 12
ANGSTY and sexy nice job.
colorfulsunrise514
2009-09-11 . chapter 12
This is on hell of a story. Amazing.
Bitter Sweet
2009-09-02 . chapter 12
Such a sweet sweet story ^_^ Great work. ^_^
kikyo4ever
2009-09-02 . chapter 12
Firstly, I'm glad you are still around and the story. After what Natsuki heard in the phone and Shizuru's nightly activities, it was easily believe that an affair might have had occurred. I like how Natsuki has a strong resolve and stick to it until she face with Shizuru and figure out what really was going on. In a relationship something like this is bound to happen esp. when Shizuru is so busy and try to make it up to Natsuki in her own way...

I would be surprise to if Natsuki suddenly yelled like that without knowing the reason. Luv how Natsuki tried to impress Shizuru. I think this is the first seeing Natsuki banging Shizuru on the bike. LOL..the garage door was opened.

will we be seeing more future chapters? i wonder.
M. Sanneth
2009-08-30 . chapter 12
Yay, this was so cute ^^ I really hope you'll write more chapters like this ^^
krugern
2009-08-30 . chapter 11
Nice chapter. Liked how Natsuki proposed, how they got married. Liked how Natsuki ended up giving Shizuru complete pleasure first. Cute how Yukino caught the bouquet.
silverice90
2009-08-29 . chapter 12
That was a cute chapter, aside from all of Natsuki's suspicions, but i would mostly likely be the same way she was. Thank you for the update.

P.S. i really do love this fic :)
Leebot
2009-08-28 . chapter 12
Okay, first things first: This could have easily been a separate story, written as a one-shot. Probably what I would have done, and it might have gotten more views... or not. Doesn't really matter, I guess. :P

I really like how you laid out the story here. It's quite a reasonable way to set the premise of Natsuki thinking Shizuru might be cheating on her (or almost thinking it :P). Every piece of the puzzle works out perfectly in character, which is quite a rare treat.

The idea of Shizuru as a teacher certainly works well. She does have that certain quality, doesn't she? I can certainly see her deciding to pursue this career, though the fact that she might keep it a secret from Natsuki when it's distracting her this much is a bit of stretch... not impossible though. When she's doing something for Natsuki, Shizuru does tend to go overboard. Even if this one was more for herself, she did get it in her mind that it would be a surprise for her. She kept a big secret like that in the past, so I could see her doing it again.

A lot of others in this I liked: That Natsuki never really believed Shizuru could cheat on her, and fought this assumption against all evidence. Similarly for Shizuru, that she never really believed Natsuki was cheating on her. Also, the actions of Hiroshi in trying to explain things to Shizuru. Too many authors would just let her run out for more drama, but I'm glad you kept it more realistic.

And this brings us to the lemon! Very, very hot indeed. You know, the sex scene in the previous chapter didn't really do it for me for some reason. Tried to figure out why for a while so I could give you a proper review on it, but it took so long that reviewing at all slipped my mind... But this one was just great, so I could have just been that I wasn't in the right mood when reading the previous one.

Anyways, much thanks for the update! I do hope you still have more coming. Until then. ;)
chum-sa
2009-08-25 . chapter 12
wow i thought u forgot this story!!yea it'd been a LONG time!!so glad that u update! --Thank u--
Trinity666
2009-08-25 . chapter 12
Great chapter 12. I am glad to see a long awaited update for this fic. It has been a long time since i read it. The whole affair situation was brilliant. The jealousy that Natsuki felt was great. You nailed their reaction. And the ending was WOW! I remember seeing a fan art of NatShiz on a motorcycle a long time ago. Great job describing the actions and environment.
Pileoflettuce
2009-08-25 . chapter 12
Rofl? Intense hiatus? Somehow I think the word "intense" is an understatement XD Still...the chappy was well done :) The thought of Natsuki cheating on Shizuru with an old cougar is LOL! And Shizuru can be that really hot teacher that everyone wants to hook up with after her classes are over :P

I thought the story was over to be honest, but I guess not :P Not that I'm complaining...

Yep, it was great. Didn't believe you updated, but it was great :)
-Lettuce
medoty77
2009-08-25 . chapter 12
Hot damn! Natsuki playing guitar, getting hit on by 40 year olds,assuming affairs, "banging" Shizuru on her bike. This is one spicy chapter! It's intresting to read your take on the domestic life of Shizuru and Natsuki. So Shizuru wants to be a teacher.. I don't see why she just didn't tell Natsuki in the first place even though she didn't want Natsuki to worry. Better to have her worried than assuming the worst in an unknown situation. Ah well, it all a worked out in the end! HOTT! ^_^
anamensis
2009-08-25 . chapter 12
Lolz to the phrase "Busty Babe Bangs Blue-Haired Broad on Bike" :P
emosewa
2009-08-25 . chapter 12
wow. almost gave me a hearth attack there. i really thought shizuru was cheating. hehe.. ~meanie~

after so long, you decided to continue this story. though i had to read it again, thanks! totally worth it!

i wonder what will happen to shizuru's company if ever she'll pursue teaching. i have a feeling tomoe will be one of her students or co-worker. im hope not if she's still obsessed. im afraid to mention it here, but what the heck, right? heheh..

and ohh.. i wonder what shizuru will do to the natsuki's boss' wife. hehe. goodluck with her.

anyways, thank you so much for the update. i really like it. good read. can't wait for me. ill be here to read it when the next chapter comes. hopefully it won't be long.

till next time..
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