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| flyingdutchman08 2008-08-14 ch 1,  | abuseHey, nice story, but we Brasilians don't speak Spanish, we speak portuguese... Thanks Valew;D |
| Lady Mage 2007-03-08 ch 1, | abuseHmm... you and I both know that happened WAY too quick. They can't like each other all ready. |
| A Purple Soul 2006-09-07 ch 15, | abuseoh pretty plzz make a sequel, i like it. very good, fun story! |
| Annabella Black 2006-01-26 ch 15, | abusethink of sequal, think of sequal, THINK OF SEQUAL! |
| Haley Anonymous 2006-01-26 ch 15, | abuseYay! You updated! It's always kind of sad to see a story come to an end, but it's probably kind of relieving for you. The story would be fine if you just left it here, but I wouldn't mind reading a sequel, but sequels aren't always that great if they weren't planned when you wrote the first part. Well anyways it's up to you if there will be a sequel. Wow I like always write the longest reviews for your story! Okay now I'm just going on about nothing. Good job! ~xX*Pinksparklez*Xx~ |
| Annabella Black 2006-01-08 ch 14, | abuseFunny chapter. James and Sirius are always hungry aren't they? |
| An Anti-Sheep Cheese Muffin 2006-01-06 ch 1, | abusehehehehehe that is so kewl my real name's Daphne that totally caught meh attention and I heart Sirius he's such a sweetie spiffin story ^_^ |
| Haley Anonymous 2006-01-05 ch 14, | abuseYay another chappie, good job, but I don't think Brazilians speak spanish, although most people think they do, I think they speak Portugese or somehthing. And when Daphnes mom says "mi niño" she is calling Daphne her BOY child, she should probably say something like "Mi hija" which I think means my daughter. And when she says "Mi niños!" That time niños works, but she should say "Mis niños!" I found a few other mistakes in the spanish, and grammar and stuff like that, but it's hard to get everything right, especially if you don't speak one of the languages you're writing, so good job. |
| Haley Anonymous 2006-01-03 ch 13, | abuseNice chapter Blackfishy! Although I don't think that they would know that Lily and James's son would be the on in the prophecy until he was born, because didn't he have to be born at a certain time, and they wouldn't know when Harry would be born before Lily was even pregnant? But it's hard to keep things like that happening in stories, and I think it would be hard for you to fix that anyways because it is part of your plot. But it is still fine, I wouldn't go back and try to fix it or anything, but please update soon! |
| absolutelynothing 2006-01-03 ch 2, | abuseI'm flattered that you put that on your site! but the world must know the truth! (or something like that...) keep writing! thanx passionfruitpeach x ;-) |
| Annabella Black 2005-12-31 ch 13, | abuseHurry up and update I got to see what happens next! |
| absolutelynothing 2005-12-15 ch 1, | abuserandomly, i agree with everything you put on your profile! it's a bit scary actually, detest siriusremus fics too! but you missed out one major fact! remus is completely straight as well! anyway your fic rules! lol p.s. i will never get over the mental scaring of accidently reading a siriusremus fic that went into WAY too much detail...need i say more? @_@ *shudder* |
| Ine Amundsen 2005-12-14 ch 12, | abuseThat was so good! loved it! As metter of fact i love the hold of your story and not just this chapter! :P... Lots of love |
| Haley Anonymous 2005-12-13 ch 12, | abusegood job once again blackfishy! I can't wait to see what happens next. Your story has really developed as you continued it, it's really good. Update soon, and I hope you get better! |
| Annabella Black 2005-12-13 ch 12, | abusehey, I'm sick and off school to at the moment but I have to go back tommorrow I have a huge exam, well anyways I love this chapter it's really great. |