 gentle gwen 2005-12-08 . chapter 4What an awesome collection of scenes! Each one has a distinct flavour and style, and gives little poignant glimpses into the characters. Kudos to you for giving yourself a platform to publish these.
I find myself in the same boat from time to time. You've finished something and think it's good, but it doesn't fit in with the style and/or tone that you've set for your story. It has grown on you, though, and you can't bring yourself to discard it.
I love your dialogue in "Underwater" especially. Lately I'm an increasing fan of innuendo in conversations. The scene is loaded, but the situation (waking up with someone) isn't. These kinds of scenes are so deliciously intense I get shivers.
Thank you for giving these moments of shine their due! |
 Blonde-Existentialist 2005-11-02 . chapter 5hum. While I really liked it, I'm thinking it will make more since after you finish Heroes |
 Blonde-Existentialist 2005-11-02 . chapter 4Wait, so where exactly in BP does this fit? |
 Blonde-Existentialist 2005-11-02 . chapter 3That really seems very Julia-esque. I think this one could have worked as a one-shot, its sorta between that and a drabble. |
 Blonde-Existentialist 2005-11-02 . chapter 2oh the foreshadowing overwelms me :P |
 Blonde-Existentialist 2005-11-02 . chapter 1Not bad, really. I see why you don't think it's quite a one-shot, and agree with you. While it's technically a complete story/thought it just doesn't really have any closure or ending. No clue how you could change it though, and enjoyable to read. |