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Reviews for: Luna Moth
gentle gwen
2005-12-08 . chapter 4
What an awesome collection of scenes! Each one has a distinct flavour and style, and gives little poignant glimpses into the characters. Kudos to you for giving yourself a platform to publish these.

I find myself in the same boat from time to time. You've finished something and think it's good, but it doesn't fit in with the style and/or tone that you've set for your story. It has grown on you, though, and you can't bring yourself to discard it.

I love your dialogue in "Underwater" especially. Lately I'm an increasing fan of innuendo in conversations. The scene is loaded, but the situation (waking up with someone) isn't. These kinds of scenes are so deliciously intense I get shivers.

Thank you for giving these moments of shine their due!
Blonde-Existentialist
2005-11-02 . chapter 5
hum. While I really liked it, I'm thinking it will make more since after you finish Heroes
Blonde-Existentialist
2005-11-02 . chapter 4
Wait, so where exactly in BP does this fit?
Blonde-Existentialist
2005-11-02 . chapter 3
That really seems very Julia-esque. I think this one could have worked as a one-shot, its sorta between that and a drabble.
Blonde-Existentialist
2005-11-02 . chapter 2
oh the foreshadowing overwelms me :P
Blonde-Existentialist
2005-11-02 . chapter 1
Not bad, really. I see why you don't think it's quite a one-shot, and agree with you. While it's technically a complete story/thought it just doesn't really have any closure or ending. No clue how you could change it though, and enjoyable to read.
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