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| Kendoka Girl 2007-04-06 ch 40,  | abuseI liked the setting of the scene with the description of the vessels. Atris and Bastila's scenes were nicely done! The description of Atris was chilling. Great dogfight scene. I couldn't have done better myself. I always loved the minor Mandalorian characters and I'm glad you included them. |
| Kendoka Girl 2007-03-28 ch 39, | abuseWow, nice way to nix the senators. I love a good battle scene and I hope this keeps building! |
| Kendoka Girl 2007-03-21 ch 38, | abuseSorry I fell off the wagon. Great flashback. A child too! Ok, I'm back in the groove. |
| Kendoka Girl 2006-11-24 ch 37, | abuseGreat writing of Atris. The whole seduction scene was powerful. |
| Kendoka Girl 2006-11-20 ch 36, | abuseAwesome fight scene with Dante and Dorman. It was fluid and graphic with lots of wonderful detail. Dante's angst over those whom he had lost was well done too. The mixture of KOTOR I and II cast was well done with Jolee making a great showing. My only comment is stylistic in that I thought some of the one-sentence paragraphs could have been combined for easier reading. Great, gripping work though with tons of energy. |
| Kendoka Girl 2006-11-12 ch 35, | abuseAwesome sense of tension. Erik's character really comes out here. I love the almost Roman atmosphere of treachery and sedition. |
| Kendoka Girl 2006-11-09 ch 34, | abuseNice tension between Dante and Lotus. Awesome fight scene with that and a great twist - sort of a obsessive one, isn't she? |
| Kendoka Girl 2006-11-08 ch 33, | abuseOh man! I continue to love Lotus and your writing of Atton and Visas is great. I also love your original characters in that they really flesh out the story. |
| Kendoka Girl 2006-11-02 ch 32, | abuseGreat opening scene! What a plot twist. I love Lotus as a character. This was a great chapter. |
| Kendoka Girl 2006-10-25 ch 31, | abuseExcellent chapter. Sorry I fell behind. Dante's action scene was well done and your working in of Visas and Atris was excellent. |
| Kendoka Girl 2006-09-05 ch 30, | abuseWhoa, great plot twist. |
| Kendoka Girl 2006-08-27 ch 29, | abuseGreat sense of tension and action. This chapter has a nice 'Star Wars' feel to it. |
| Kendoka Girl 2006-08-21 ch 28, | abuseAgain, great insight into Dante and I love the family angle with him. I'm out for a week so see you on the flip side. |
| Kendoka Girl 2006-08-21 ch 27, | abuseStill going strong. This is a fun tale, full of action and intrigue. I have only one extremely minor character comment, but it's open to debate - I've been told that Master Vandar does not speak like Yoda. Again, very minor. Vandar's battle was excellent and full of energy. I don't recall if we've discussed this before, but I just read that you are a crim justice major. I got my MS in CJ a few years ago and it was a blast. |
| Kendoka Girl 2006-08-14 ch 26, | abuseI like dream sequences and you do these very well. I do envy your ability to bring out the inner workings of the characters. |