Great story! Watch out for spelling errors. When you said started, I knew you ment stared but watch out for those next time. I can't wait to read more.

the sting of a manticore causes instant death, as stated by fantastic beasts and where to find them

Thank you very much for such a story to read, i enjoyed every second, minute and hour that i spend reading this.

So, i cant say anything more than

Thank you.

I loved it!

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I loved it! I loved how you described the characters, and their emotions. I sure have to pay the respect due to Ms. Rowling, but so far, in this one chapter, I can see this story had ALOT of potential. I can't wait to keep reading. Again, I loved it!

this is disgusting

OK - after yelling at you in an earlier chapter about grammar, I must say that despite that problem, this is a very, very compelling read and after five, almost six hours (it's 2:55 AM now), I've finally finished reading it. It's an enjoyable, well-constructed story that does a remarkable job of bringing Harry and Hermione together in a way that is believable and convincing.

I am glad that you took the time to put 'pen to paper' as it were and I look forward to seeing other stories from you.

The only thing I would ask is that you go back and fix all of the places where the pronouns don't agree. That is SUCH a blatant error and so easily correctable that it's worth doing. It would enhance the readability of the story.

Regards,

the_scribbler

You wrote:
"“You think I never noticed the look on your face whenever she kissed either Ron or myself?"

NO NO NO NO NO NO NO ** NO.

YOU WOULD NEVER, EVER WRITE:

“You think I never noticed the look on your face whenever she kissed myself?"

YOU SHOULD HAVE WRITTEN:

"“You think I never noticed the look on your face whenever she kissed either Ron or ME?"

GAH!...You need SERIOUS help with your personal pronoun agreement(s). GO GET A ENGLISH TEXTBOOK AND LEARN IT. IT'S NOT HARD. PLEASE. THIS DRIVES ME NUTS.

Great story, it was the first time i have seen a Harry in control of Voldemorts body, it was well done.

The ending was great i didnt quite expect him to be headmaster at the end but it was a good surprise.

I look forward to any more work you post.

Cel