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| DogDemonK9 2008-04-12 ch 2,  | abuseAww this is defentally cheesy but i really like it. I hope you haven't given up on this one. |
| Runadaemon 2007-11-18 ch 2, | abuseheh. I'd be interested in seeing where this goes. :) |
| Relena Peace 2007-07-02 ch 2, | abuseOMG, first of all...it's been years (100% true btw, YEARS) since I've read anything or reviewed anything here on But, when I got on I NEW I had to read something of yours because I've ALWAYS been a huge fan! ^.^" I LOVE YOUR WORK! These last two chapters have had me giggling and ready for the next one! Please, continue! :: huggles :: ~Relena Peace |
| Kandida 2007-05-13 ch 2, | abuse>< update please> |
| erlexus 2007-04-19 ch 2, anon. | abuseOMG! Heero's afraid to kiss her, tee hee. Brilliant! XD XD XD |
| erlexus 2007-04-19 ch 1, anon. | abuseWai! Cute. What a fun story. Poor Relena, Heero won't kiss her. Keep it up! XD |
| Omnicat 2007-02-10 ch 2, | abuseI still like this story, and where it's going. The thought behind it is cool - tough, stoic Heero being afraid of a little kiss. ^^ There's just one thing that bothers me. Your writing style seems a bit too systematic. One line of speech, one line of action. One line of speech, one line of action. One line of speech, one line of action. One line of speech, one line of action. And so on and so forth. Speech that is only ever accompanied by 'he said' without giving the reader a look at the characters' body language and such is not a good thing, but here the actions seem a bit redundant at times, like it's only done for the sake of doing it. Does Duo ever sit still for more than three seconds?! Iunno. It could be a matter of taste. I guess it does give your prose a certain, what'd ya call it... rhythm? It's just that it's not a comfortable rhythm, at least for me. But that was the only negative thing I found about this fic. The rest - charactersiation, flow, vocabulary, etc - was nice. I'm looking forward to the next chapter! ~Omnicat |
| Aeris-Eithne 2007-02-04 ch 2, | abuseGo Relena! She's dated almost all the Gundam pilots. ^_^ I love this premise, and can't wait to read more! |
| elfwarden 2007-02-04 ch 2, | abuseGreat story. Update soon, i can't wait for how Heero will do :P Wel done Elfwarden |
| Cryoxe 2007-02-01 ch 2, | abuseThis seems cute ^.^ keep it up |
| Rinny Leonheart 2007-01-19 ch 2, | abuseIt's been a while since you updated and I've been dying to know what happens. Get your butt in gear! I wanna know how it goes! LOL! |
| AirStriker 2007-01-15 ch 2, | abusehaha How cute is it for Heero to have kissing anxiety? xD |
| Liz (Genkai Lady) 2007-01-15 ch 2, anon. | abuseDearest Black Rose, You write the hottest/college senior/rumpled hair/frustrated/sexy Heero ever. Love so strong wild Wing Zeros couldn't drag it away from me, Liz (Genkai Lady) |
| Miss Megaboo 2007-01-14 ch 2, | abuselol ^_^ I'm so glad you updated this one! I'm glad there's another chapter after this one. Its just a cute, sweet, fic that's great between all your big ones. lol ^_^ I hope you update this one and your others soon! |
| c 2007-01-13 ch 2, anon. | abuseWe're getting closer, can't wait for the next post |