WOW...I don't think I've really read a Harry Potter fanfiction that concerns Snape with people so in character. You really stuck with the canon but at the same time filled out Snape's character so well, I'm really impressed. Though I really don't know how you have time to write this well. I'm one of six and I know my mother hardly has time to read let alone write, kudos to you. Keep writing the good stuff! Thank you for the wonderful story.

awesome story! loved the interaction between snape and hermione and snape was perfectly in character but with your own twist: absolutely slytherin through and through but with a little bit of red and gold thrown in. and now im off to check your profile for a sequel...

I've just finished your story and I'm really impressed at how you're characterizing Snape. Usually, I don't read fanfiction involving him because many writers just think of Alan Rickman when it comes to Snape, but obviously, you don't.

You've also captured Hermione's view on the happenings and on Harry, Ron and the teachers in a very believeable way and I'm amazed how your story fits into Canon.

Your story is well written and easy to read and I guess I could learn quite a bit of vocabulary if I reread it thoroughly. You may have improved my English grade by writing this.

"Snape was sorry they were dead? But Snape repented before they were dead, Harry had seen Dumbledore tell the Wizengamot that in his Pensieve in fourth year..."

I'm glad I'm not the only one who noted this canon inconsistency. It's likely only people who are trying to write fic and keep the timelines straight even notice it.

I love "if she trusted him, would she become him?" because it's pretty clear that's where Hermione's headed in any case.

This was beautifully done; it, too, is going on my C2. :)

-K

Another great ending. Snape's last request is damning - there is no right answer, and he has been careful, in his way, to refuse to try to convince Hermione that he is a good man or a bad one. If anything, he seems to have striven to make her more confused - or, rather, to depend on her own logic rather than allowing herself to be swayed by emotion.

This continues to be very interesting. :)

-K

That last exchange is fabulous.

-K

This is really quite good. When I was rec'd here I thought your name looked familiar, and... of course - you wrote the HP poetry 'How Dumb Were You', which I put on my C2. It's good to know you're just as good, if not better, at prose.

Your tone is remarkably like J.K.'s, if lacking some of its inherent humor - and to be clear, I don't think the story suffers for that. You've got two quite serious characters here, Hermione and Snape, and perhaps they are served better without JK's constant nudge-and-wink.

Snape is as interesting and inscrutable as ever! His attitude towards Hermione is hilarious in its own way. I get the impression he appreciates being able to talk to someone he sees as intelligent - and also that he gets genuine pleasure out of baiting the girl. And finally, that he is frustrated with Hermione's inability to formulate her own way of thinking.

Some lines that hit home for me were "I'm going to teach you how to think" - I had a teacher tell *me* that once. I was furious at the time - I already KNEW how to think! - but darn it, she was right. Also, Snape's assertion that Hermione trusts him for no apparent reason, because she is a follower. That stings, but mostly because it's at least partially true.

Continuing to read and enjoy,

-K

I was rec'd here from Fiction Alley after asking for fics in which Snape mentors someone who is NOT Harry, and I'm glad I was. It looks interesting so far! :)

-K

“I forgot,” he drawled as he reached into a drawer for a new quill. “He doesn’t want you either. Pity. Still, there’s probably someone desperate enough to be interested. Try Longbottom.”

Damn! He know's how to be cruel!

Wow. I'm kind of disappointed that it ended here.

A wonderful open ending. You delved into the minds of Severus Snape and Hermione Granger deeply. It can be a mini-novel dealing with the workings of their minds, especially Hermione. Excellent work.

I hope the sequel is in the workings already. I'm extremely anticipating it right now. Thanks. ú

It's WAY after Passover (2007), Where is the sequel? Inlove the way you look behind the scenes of the characters. I wish you wouldn't let JKR's failings stop you from these delicious stories. I miss you.

Great dialogue.

An illuminating conversation.

My fav line:
“Indeed? If your two cohorts could escape expulsion after breaking both the national and international codes of wizarding secrecy, why should you expect harsher treatment? Theft of a few ingredients, even illegally brewing restricted substances, hardly compares with stealing an illegally charmed Muggle artefact and displaying it to the entire countryside.”

My fav line:
She stared up at him open-mouthed.
“I’m not interested in the back of your throat, girl. I asked you a question.”

He thought she could make it up with Ron. How? She didn’t even know what it was about, let alone how to mend it.


Rather glad that the concept of RHr reconciliation is out the window.