:,( Sad. Then again, anything involving her death scene fills me with sorrow. Curse you, Chapter 375!

That was beautiful! It made me make girlish sounds one would associate with a particularly adorable kitten. This fic is heading to my favorites list just for that one peotic drabble.

I would have to say you're getting better at writing with sentences, but they are still choppy. You can really tie alot of these sentences together with commas. I think you are also just looking at the surface with Sesshoumaru and Kagura. You are giving just what they show obviously, try diggijng a little deeper, if you choose to break them down further than what the anime shows, alot of your metaphors just don't work. Some dialoge or actualy times where they come into contact, perhaps flashbacks within the thrid person would be nice.

If you made this into a poem, that would be better this is far too choppy for poetic story writing.

Once again, this is all CONTRUCTIVE critism, meant to help you GROW as a writer.

Ahh, isnt both of the stories Kagura/Sesshomaru? using fire & ice to describe them is perfect, from their character down right to their fate. And sometimes its hard to remember Kagura was so young with her character & appearance. But reading your second story, reminds me of the scenes whereby she sat alone on the river banks looking at the stars, or just flying around aimlessly, didnt she looked just like a little lonely child?

it a poetic summary of their relationship very nice.

this was good but i didnt really understand it do you think you could make the person speaking a little more clear?

Such beautiful metamorphical prettyness. XD