it's good, real good, i bit off spelled but good, continue if possible

English is obviously not your first language, but that's no excuse for hacking it to death with an axe. Get yourself a beta or don't write in English. Reading your work, as it stands, is like washing my face with sand paper. It grates!

Though I will give you praise for proper comma usage with dialogue. You're one out of maybe ten people on this site who know how to use a comma with quotes... and that's actually kind of scary, considering how many on this site have English as a first language.

Not trying to be cruel, just honest. Reading should be fun, not a chore to sort out badly broken English. Get a beta!

another great chapter i loved it, and hope see more from you soon

Nice as always. Seems like your playing favorites now eh? \m/

Gets better everytime keep the great work up

Another excellent chapter, very well written your talents get better ever chapter

Great chapter, excellent detail, and no offense or that but i prefere this to your new fic. Has more action and your great at writing this type of thing, maybe I could ask for a few pointers ya know make my fic way better

Another well done chapter Dewi. Keep up the good work.

Well done Dewi. Sorry about the late review, been a bit busy.

Hey,

Great story so far. I found it a little hard to read because of some grammar errors, but its still good.

Keep it up!

HEY! I'M BACK! hahah, wow it's been a long time, I have kind of been out of the writing/reading mood for a while but now I'm back and ready for action. So you did Underbelly huh? that's cool, but yeah I figured english wasn't your first language but it's okay I can understand what your saying and the fact you are doing this is really cool, anyways I like this chapter because you gave us a lot more on the characters, about how they feel and stuff. Poor wanda, and Jimmy, it seems in every Fanfiction little old Jim always gets the short end of the stick, anyways I will read other chapters as soon as possible, peace

Hi there my friend. Great story and please update soon ok?

Nice ending! lol I think anyone could tell who your favourite characters are lol. But about the Yoko thing that was just a joke, and I don't know if you meant it the way it seemed but that seemed like a reall cheap shot on me. But w/e anyways good ending I can't wait to see how you do BFP!

Yeah another decent chapter confused me a second when you said he ignited the engine but then i realised what you meant but that was a decent go at the end of the first scenario

Nice use of George as a doctor. And you show Cindy getting her medicine case, which I failed to mention. I'm gonna go fix that now ;). Anyway, it's interesting how the characters interact with each other. Good job. And thanks for reading my story.