"“5 Fingers” Kip whined; loosing all cred he had gained with the readers when kicking the door through."

*cracks up* Best. Line. Ever! XD

Glad to see you're back in the writing gig, mate (and with your usual funny style). A good start, nice and punchy and sets up the story well. Could use a smidge (but just a smidge) of beta-ing, but nothing too major. I look forward to the next chapter )