Wow this is really a great fan fiction story !
I really like keisuke and kyoko love story !
I hope you make more of it!
I'm looking forward to it.
Good luck on your next story

ok...i really hate to say this, but i promised myself no sugar-coating reviews. in short, it sucked.

authors should NEVER EVER use abbreviations like "w/" in place of with. and PLEASE take grammar and syntax lessons. your syntax is stunningly awry. so think over this story carefully or at the very least make sure this thing NEVER happens in another one of your stories.

plus...the one second battle over scene is completely aweful, at least put a little effort in it. a good story, whether a one-shot or not, is not only focused on one aspect, it has expanded boundaries.

so yes, GRAMMAR AND SYNTAX AGREEMENT LESSONS

Hi! Havn't seen a lot of iD fanfics at a constant. I just realized my fanfics are too serious! Anyway, every story gives me pointers. Nice story! But I think Kyoko's friend needs a name... Best of luck to your next fics!