 hansolo18 2008-04-07 . chapter 2I love your story. Its sad that I'm late in finding it though. If you ever decide to type more. I'll be there for it! |
 William Banner 2007-03-30 . chapter 2Very nice. I must say, this is a good piece of writing, the entire thing. If you keep on writing like this, you could possibly make a real profit from it. Can't wait to see the third chapter. |
 jordn 2007-03-01 . chapter 2 excellent story, i especially love your unique writing style. seriously, someone kill a nazi or i'll go insane. PLEASE UPDATE! Hurry, i am GOING INSANE! i hope write more frequently. and do you have an account at because i think that would be right up your alley.anyway gotta go. please email me if you do have an account at because i'll read your stories happily ASAP. |
 Sir Dr. Pinkleton III cubic 2006-12-07 . chapter 2Once again, you amaze me. Really drew me in, yunno? the funny thing is that this reminds me of my own writing. =D good luck writing another chapter, it'd be pleasant to read what happens next. |
 billybobbybillbob 2006-12-02 . chapter 2hi, great story. "we got to shoot at tanks. Oh joy!":) lol
cant wait for the next part of the story.
I dont really think there is anything for you to improve on, but maybe you could have tryed to make the ending of Omaha beach as well, instead of skipping straight ahead.
Im 11 years old, and have recently made a story called sometimes you cant make you on your own, and are waiting to be able to upload it. I come from palmerston north, new zealand.
My story is about a ww2 american corporal, who struggles to fight through Omaha Beach (typical, i know) then his platoon is assigned to rescue some paratroopers who are surrounded by germans.
i only just recently made an account and can upload my story on monday.
overall, you made a great story so far... and im sorry i talked mainly on this comment about my story and details.
see ya. |
 foxdude33 2006-05-13 . chapter 1I like this. I'm adding it to my favorites list. |
 yo momma 2006-04-24 . chapter 1 this story is really good, man! i am a big military fan, and so far you are making the landing on Omaha realistic from the MC's point of view. add a little bit more weapons detail, and will someone kill a freaking ** already? at least make them fire their weapons... |
 Deltasniper 2006-03-05 . chapter 1 I don't think a normal American would use the word 'mate', unless he has British or Irish background. Overall, it's pretty good and has a healthy amount of length to it. Keep up the good work. |
 Tyler Swanson 2006-01-11 . chapter 1 I enjoy writing stories, and I wanted to look at a few war stories. I found yours in a search through Google, and I found it interesting. Your depiction of Sarge's death was gripping, one of the better uses of emotion in amateur writing that I've seen (by amateur I mean you are not a professional author, not that you suck). I would like to see this continue through historical battles, but of course it's up to you.
As far as criticism, there were some grammar errors (we all get them, just proofread), and Tucker's "fondness" of battle seems a little bit over the top, like he has a psychological disorder or something. Other than that, great story, hope to see more. Feel free to e-mail me if you'd like. |
 Sergeant Minoso 2005-11-20 . chapter 1 hey man, i forget where, but I either know you from MOH Forums, or that WWII forum. Sorry, I cant remember where from though, haha. well, I've read through about half of your story, I really like it! |
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