okay, one word. CUTE. aww...you made kiba so adorable. :D and i sense a peleraian coming up...:3 kiba should get tsubasa a dog tag that says, "Kiba's", since he's wearing her necklace and so to announce that she's taken. ;)

oh so cute, update soon, please. ;)PEACE;)

awessomes

Aw it's so cute!

Write more soon!

--Michy

AMAZING

I'm honestly not a huge fan when it comes to OC's but Tsubasa is such a perfect match for Kiba. I love this romance and the action in the story, it saddens me that there's only a few chapters left.. :( *cough* SEQUEL *cough* lol ;) Anyways, amazing story and I hope to hear more from you in the future.

It has been forever since I've seen a chapter on this story, and that is a crying shame! It's a great story!

awesome-ariffic

great so far!

first chapter! so far so good! YAY!

PLZ CONITUE PLZ!

THAT IS SO COOL! I nearly died laughing. Keep at it

Ello. Leopardstar here. Keep writing, and um... how will Tsubasa get her powers back again? Hmph. This is such a cliffy.

Rock On!

No, I think it's a good idea that you didn't post the mission on there. Maybe you could have put brief flashbacks or something, adding another argument.
I still stand by my organization suggestion. It would make the story easier to follow and attract more readers.

Poor Neji. When you put it that way, you just have to feel sorry for him.
I love your original characters by the way. Though you could work on organizing your paragraphs a bit. Sometimes it's kind of hard to tell who's talking.