Cool, but i think that you should put this story from an outside perspective...

It's good, probaby deserves to be in the 7% percentile. Seems to be good.

Great one-shot, i think that this story falls into the two percent range, well keep on writing stories of this qualitiy.

Hm. Interesting. I like the direction this took with the Queen of Blades. I have often imagined that after she won the battle in Brood War that she sort of slumped into depression like you suggest, because she remembers when she was a human, and as a zerg she has an ongoing desire to destroy. What will she do when there is nothing left to destroy.

Very nice. You try to portray Kerrigan's emotions very well but you probally could have done better. For a one shot I would put it in the 7%.

Hm...it's alright. Seems a bit too candid for Kerrigan, actually. See, I doubt she realizes how much her emotions affect her, and she would never admit it, not even to herself. Also, it's rushed. This story is based upon emotions and feelings, and with those kinds of stories you have to take your time and let it really grab your audience, that way people will feel for your character like the way you do.

You're right, it's decent. On a scale of 1 to 10, it's a 5.

good job

I like Kerrigan emotion fics. My first one was like that, as well. Anyway, even tho I like your theme, I didn't really understand her problem. From what I read, she's feeling bad about war? It's hard to understand whats going on, since theres lots of scenes that don't really seem to have any connection.
Aside from that, your writing is okay. Description is nice and narration is cool. For a one-shot it definitely falls into that '7percent' you talked about, so i suppose your happy :-)