ntinue so that i know who is the guy at last

Cags, nice story. Thank you for sharing. ^^ Keep up your good work!!

I would like to add to the commenter before me (whoever he is).

Your characters are so OOC. I don't feel like they're Lantis and Hikaru anymore. Maybe to those who are not die-hard fans, it would seem okay to characterize them that way. But for those who followed MKR since its first release in 1995, this fic is made up of mary sues and gary stus.

"A well rounded critique is often the most rewarding gift a reader can give ."

First, there are a lot of grammatical errors in your work. HYou should pay attention to that.

Second, your characters are OOC (out of character). You should work on them or you'll end up getting a Mary Sue. I'm afraid the way you wrote them removed their ability to reach out to your target audience.

Third, work on your title. A good story must have a good title.

I LOVE IT this story is great i thought that it was funny i want to read more so please update soon i can't wait for more . :3

Nice

that was a good chapter. and this is a good story keep it up.

This is a very good story! I'm really curious to find out who the guy is at the end of the 9th chapter. Please hurry and good job!

I really liked this chapter. I wonder who the person is at the end. Can't wait for the next chapter

this great story pleaz write more soon

Hm, i got to pick at things, there are still some grammer errors, such as one of his rare smile, it should be smiles, you put he's smile, it either should be he's smiling, or his smile. hm, saying smile too much makes the word sound a bit weird. Anyways this was a good chapter, but its kinda getting crowded, i think theres a bit too many characters, which makes you miss some of them or not give someone enough time. Also i cant wait for the next chapter, update soon.

Hello. I love your story. I know that you haven't updated since June, but please I hope you continue. Also that, umm you have some gramatical mistakes, and I don't think that speaking Japanese and not telling those american readers what it means, it's kinda sad. I mean it's a bit harder to read that way. I mean I know some Jap but I don't know all of it. So maybe have like a definition section before you write your story up top. So ya. Well thanks && overall great story! =]

i thought it was awsome i cant wait for the next chapter.

I love your story, but you might want to fixs some parts because they don't make much since. Like when their talking, just little things like that.

Aw!! I love this chapter! Hm the cousins names sound so familiar i think their names are from Yu yu Hakashu or something like that, i really nver watched that anime. I would hav liked to see Lantis protecting Hikaru from Kuno, which would make Hiei less mean towards lantis. I no everyone is gonna find out soon arnt they?