Reviews for When Madness Returns

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Starling Rising 2007-06-04 ch 4,	abuseYou can't just leave Daine all nutty like that! And poor Numair with his shoulder all ripped up and the love of his life out of his reach! I'd really appreciate it if you updated again. ;)
wildmage 2007-03-18 ch 4, anon.	abuseyse!yes continue this is reaally great i luv it! you rock!
lady eowyn 2006-12-10 ch 4, anon.	abuseI really liked your story and hope you continue it! it's well written and not boring, and i hope you make it nice and long; the long ones are my favorite. and the characters aren't OoC. one thing i really dislike are the cliff hangers! i can't stand them! and i hope there will be more fluff in the future chapters. A fair wondrous job you've done on this story!
NecromanceRayne 2006-08-01 ch 4,	abuseMORE!
tora.of.the.sand 2006-06-20 ch 3,	abusehey! my friends want 2 review so here they are!- Flicker(squirell)-- u have a sick mind. Alanna-- i like it, good details, good writing techniques - but there are definitly some PG-13 parts. Still good Ok, so those are my buds. I have 2 say... I LUV UR STORY! thank you!
tora.of.the.sand 2006-06-18 ch 4,	abuseI LUV UR STORY! u HAVE to continue it! if u dont i shall send my adopted "baby" dragon on u! i can always help if u need it! i have a story of my own i'd love you 2 read uf u could! its called "Mixed Up Story" the URL is i shall have the next chap up today or tomarrow!
hubba.0.bubba 2006-02-15 ch 4,	abuseGOOD STORY UPDATE ASAP! Poor Numair...
kaededainecalwyn 2006-02-15 ch 4,	abuseThat was absolutly awesome! It is so suspensful, I can't wait until the next chapter!I loved how there was Daine's POV and everyone else's! Great job! Please continue!
The.Adventures.Of.Me 2006-02-15 ch 4,	abuseWow... thats... wow... She's going crazy. No words to describe it.. Please update soon.
Pink Squishy Llama 2006-02-15 ch 4,	abuseLike! More more! Please?
StAnDiNgContrapposto 2006-02-15 ch 4,	abusei have absolutely no idea what to think of this story. Its basically identical to the story Wolfish Desires by Crazyhorsegirl88 but then it reads like a humor fic!! like, that she bites his hand off? and as we all know, or should know at least, wolves do not eat people, as alanna seems to think, in this story. i refuse to believe that no one would rush to her aid or pin her down or anything, especially alanna, just standing there all scared and worried and not acting, whether it would do good or not, that's just not what she would do. why didn't she use her magic to begin with, say, to throw up a wall around daine so she couldn't hurt anyone before she attacked numair? Even numair could do that or more, seeing as he is a black robe and not entirely defenseless (though i do understand the whole "I love her so i don't want to hurt her" mood. haha) I think you write well, but this story really just doesn't know what it wants to be! i was also very confused as to why everything seems to repeat it's self... you have used some of the same lines but in different context... i assume the last half of the page was a mistake? an uploading problem or a proofreading problem? either way you need to go back and reread. also, some minor things, "young looking cubs" if she's a wolf, it would be 'pups' and the brown hair that came when she transformed, it would most likely be grey if its a wolf, i dunno... this story just seems to play out like some guady werewolf slasher film... i'm really sorry to have to write this not-so-great review, but you asked to know what we think, and well, this is what i think, i hope you don't get angry, i'm just trying to help, and i'm not trying to be patronizing if it comes off that way. I think you should continue this, but first, maybe do a rewrite of this chapter, also, it would be great if you could clear up the issues with characterization and genre. Once again, you are a good writer, and i KNOW you can do better then this! ~NB44
KnightbyDay 2006-02-15 ch 1,	abuseawesome! hope there's an update soon! (me like wolves)
Fauna Greywolf 2006-01-13 ch 3,	abuseapparently Numair needs to read the instruction manual on "how to put a magical wall around your girlfriends wild magic to keep her from going crazy." mabye we should get him the for dummies version.
The.Adventures.Of.Me 2006-01-13 ch 3,	abuseWow! This is really good! I can't wait to find out what happens, so update soon!
Jules-Gemma 2006-01-13 ch 3,	abuseThat was great! Please update as soona as possible!

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