This is really good!! I can't wait for the next bit. Keep it up!

I hope you update soon, I really enjoyed reading these two chapters!

Wow, i really like your story. It's really well writen, amusing, and has an intresting plot base. I think that even though it's only two chapters long now,it definetly has some potential in being a great fanfiction. I'm really looking forward to reading more so post soon okay?

ooh! ooh! laughing...it hurts! so funny! go on, you know you want to do more! loving the bunny thing. loving loving loving! keep it up, you must!

lol, that was a funny chapter! I'm glad you updated, and i'm very sorry for your loss, i know what it's like to lose a pet who's dear to me. :(
So, you can catch the hints that something's going on in Albel's head, weither he's ready to admit it or not:) And the little white fluffball was so adorable!

Great Job! I give you a 100/10! Please update soon!

Peace,
MelanieStar

-claps- This chapter made me laugh. Good job

"Albel inwardly pouted when he realized that the two women must've jumped out of the speeding wagon when it lost control. Pity, he was looking forward to witnessing rag doll physics in action."
-- Hah! Yeah, Albel tells himself that, and yet, if he wanted to see 'rag doll physics' so badly he could have just let the wagon hit Nel.

A word-swap: "I'd never driven the wagon before and I asked Farleen if she would let me take the reigns." -- 'reigns' should be 'reins' in this case. But that's the only swap I noticed this time!

"If you're about to ask if I saw Albel Nox just save Nel Zelpher, land in a questionable position, and lean down to... I don't even want to think about it... Then no. I didn't see a thing." She looked at Farleen's elated expression and immediately burst her bubble by saying "And neither did you."
-- *smirk* Poor Farleen. ;)

Heh, the puffball-creature made me laugh...though it had its 'scary' moments when it showed its teeth and fangs and its eyes turned red. Kinda reminds me of 'gremlins'... I can just see it - by the time they reach Kirlsa, the creature will be permanently attached to the end of Albel's braid, and Albel will be so accustomed to it, he'll just ignore it most of the time, only trying to get rid of it when he gets the odd mocking comment about his new 'hair ornament'. ^_^

It's the Fitter furball from Hades and it's got a fetish for Albel...hehehe. That's good. I can see this little furball following Albel around and annoying him. I love the furball. -righted itself and gleefully chomped down on Albel's braid yet again.- that's a priceless image I will always hold dear, the whole scene!

Good chapter. Oh I liked it bunches. All the little puns and poor Farleen - that was good...the crash was Tynave's fault (hehehe) Wonderful!

Hope things are getting better for you. And don't worry about how long it takes - this chapter was well worth the wait.

BWAHAHA! Knee-slappin' good! GOSH! This was awesome and definetly made my day! These were some of the best lines:

-he'd have probably smirked when he dubbed it "the root of all evil" in his mind.- LMAO! HAHA, that root WAS the root of all evil, literally! WONDERFUL!

-"Did you see what I-" (Farleen), "If you're about to ask if I saw Albel Nox just save Nel Zelpher, land in a questionable position, and lean down to... I don't even want to think about it... Then no. I didn't see a thing." (Tynave)- LOL! I would most likely mistake Albel and Nel's position as something else too...

-"PERVERT!" Nel screamed, "Oh, you WISH, Zelpher!" Albel spat- LMFAO! GOSH! WOO, that was soo funny, I bet Albel seriously enjoyed it though. I mean, he kept feeling her chest up cause he didn't know what it was...or did he?

This was such a wonderful chapter, very funny! There is definetly something there, and Farleen agrees, "Those two have got it bad." Sorry about your cat, right around your b-day too, which by the way HAPPY B-DAY :)!

Hopefully this will make you feel better! IT SURE MADE ME FEEL BETTER! BUT, I would feel EVEN BETTER! if you updated again, very soon! Until then! GOOD JOB AND KEEP IT UP! And here's an extra, superduper sized, sugar-filled-to-the-rim, cake JUST FOR YOU!

Bye-ee!

Aww, you sound like you need an Albel plushie! Anyway good chapter and I can't wait for an update. I'm still working (coughtryingtocough) on Aquios High.

WOOT! Total awesomeness to the max!
As for Nel's eyes, i don't care. I like the idea of Nel's eyes being green. In my opinion, there's too many green-eyed people in that group. Fayt... Maria... Roger... Sophia... Peppita... you get my point!
Love the story tho. Hurry up and update! LORD ABLEL COMMANDS IT!

GOSH DARNIT! Why didn't I review this before? I know I read it before though...must have been too busy, well SORRY ABOUT THAT!

Ah, AWESOME START! Though I am disappointed that you left it at a cliff hanger! GAARRH! It was getting soo good too! I liked all the Alnel fluff in-between. The attraction is definitly there, they just need a little push.

I though these lines were awesome!

-He smirked to himself at the thought of what Zelpher would do when she saw him. "Probably shit herself." He muttered to himself, his smirk becoming a grin.-

-"Are you sure that's okay with you, Nox?" She said, fighting back an evil grin.

"Of course I'm sure, woman." He spat.

"Okay then, if you're sure you want to pledge your loyalty to Aquaria..." She said, nearly losing her composure at the sight of his shocked expression.

"WHAT?" He coughed, grabbing Nel by the shoulders and glaring at her with malice. "I agreed to no such terms!"- LMAO! That showed him a thing or two! GO NEL!

Ah, that was great! GOOD JOB! Keep up the good work, and update soon dammit! I NEED MORE ALNEL!

What a lovely story...please update soon! ^-^

Hi! I just wanna say that I really, really like your story! And a cliffhanger at that! Tsk, tsk. :) You've interpreted Nel and Albel perfectly, you've got a great plot, and feelings are obviously there on both sides! You're really outdone yourself, I praise you for this story and urge you to update soon! AWESOME!

100/10! Perfect, flawless, and deep. You go! ;) **Adds story to favorites list**

Peace out,
MelanieStar
A AlNel lover

wow! what's gonna happen?! TEL ME! this is so awesome! and no worries; i liked nel with purple eyes better, even though i used green in my fiction-thingy. please write more. otherwise, i'll be forced to...cry! mwah. mwah ha. mwah ha ha. mwah ha ha ha. MWAH HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA! oh yes...