Congratulations on reaching the end; it's kind of poetic that it's chapter 13. I'm glad you managed to finish this fic. It's fitting to the theme, I think, that it ended the way that it did. Not all stories can have happy endings.

There were a few little things that seemed just a bit off to me - I wouldn't think that Kaori and Atlas would be kissing each other with Mayura there all injured and having just come back from being controlled by evil. I just thought they'd probably be more focused on her then, since they'd been working so hard to save her. But like I said, it was just a little thing, no big deal, really. Great job on completing this fic and for being brave enough to not sugarcoat the ending. Nice work.

I take it the next chapter is the end or almost the end? Very dramatic cliffhanger! Will Mayura be okay or not? I liked that everyone was fighting together, with no one running off. Nice work!

A very action packed chapter, although my favorite part was, of course, the Kyou and Kagura moments. When he got jealous at the mention of Haru and then realized that she was looking to him and not Haru ...sigh. Very sweet. Off to the next chapter!

ack! what ABOUT mayura?!?!?!? ono ! 0.0

A little short but it was good to see Kyou and Kagura reenter the sory. I like the plants being turned into animals and attacking; I wouldn't want to have to face a poison ivy mouse for a number of reasons. Nice chapter.

The story's still moving at a nice pace; no boring chapters here. There are some run-on sentences and missing punctuation in this chapter, though. You might want to give it another look over sometime. Otherwise, good job!

Well, that's bound to complicate matters between the sisters and Atlas. This chapter was a little short but I can understand you wanting to contain lemon to one section at this point. Why do I get the feeling that things are only going to get worse for Mayura from here? Good chapter.

Whoa, that turned even more dramatic than I was expecting. Poor Mayura, being controlled like that. Congratulations to you for trying something new, though. Here's hoping it works out for you in the coming chapters.

Uh-oh, Mayura's up to no good. I'm curious as to who's behind the voices in her head and what exactly they want from her. Nice job of holding the dramatic tension!

Listening to the voices in your head is rarely a good thing . . .letting them take you to another world/plane/dimension has to be worse. On to the next chapter!

omg, what happens next?!?!?!? i cant wait for the next chapter!

whoa! This is really good!

oh, and i hope atlas starts to like mayura...

this is a rely gud story!! cept.. this chapter is lyk, repeated... other than that, is RELY gud! ov course, i wouldnt mind if the chapters were longer:D:D:D

hey, i think im lyk, the first reviewer! KEWL!

this is reely gud, pls yupdate all of ur stories!