A great story. Very well written.

Keep it up

You don't suck, don't worry. Yay for Sue parodies! Who stupidly says that awesome alliteration is a cruel crime?

"When the red convertible hit Mary-Sue she folded like a rag doll and went flying."

Simple description, but very vivid wince

Anyway, this was hilarious, amusing and nicely written so far. Fate and Luck! Bwuahahha, so happy Luck intervened and Mary Sue didn't make it through. Very interesting, though, that she finds her true love as she lies there bleeding. Is she gonna die? And post the next chapter soon, I'd like to know where our three hapless bystanders have gone. Hopefully some place obscure with language barriers.