very interesting plz update soon i cant wait sitting on the edge of my seat to finish it... so keep up the good work

good, interesting



update soon,PLEASE.

Wow, so engrossing! I look forward to more.

Wow, nice set up, great composition, and well-treated characterization. An interesting read.

I have written previously about your fanfic, "A Higher Realm". You made Koga sound English. You have changed his personality completely! If anyone killed his tribe members he would not act so kind. Not to metion humans would not have been able to kill wolf demons. I guess you cannot change it now, however you can improve on your writing skills in the future. I am aware I mispelled intimidating on my previous constructive criticism review.

I have just read the less than your entire first chapter of the Inuyasha fanfiction, entitled "A Higher Realm". To begin with the personality you gave for Jaken is very unrealistic. He would cowar in fear of Koga, especially without Sesshomaru being present. Rin would not have so easily dismissed Koga's presence, seeing as in the anime she stood stiff wth terror. She has nightmares about what happened, so whywould she forgive him. She explained all of this to Kohaku when he was guarding her. You gave Koga a slightly less intemidating personality and a more foolish one. I know that in fanfiction you can make it however you please, but you did not do the anime justice. I hope my constructive criticism does not offend or hurt you too much. If you are I apologize. I would also get offended if I worked ** a story and got a reply full of only negatives. I plan to finish reading your story, however. I am sure you can do better, if you really try.

Please continue.

Your writing has taken on a very meditative feel here. I must say, in comparison to the battle scenes in earlier chapters, this one read in a much more... relaxing way. I like it. Not only is it soothing, but it may foreshadow action in the future, hm? ~_^

I can see how the plot is shining through in this chapter, as you said. *hugs* It's so good to read a psquare fic again. So sorry it took me so long to review, but, here I go! ^^

As above, the first portion of this chapter seemed to glide; the parts of it excluding the dialogue (dear, I hope you know what I'm talking about) were mysteriously intriguing. While I think this part could have been structured a bit better, as switching from descriptions to dialogue was difficult on my part, you got your message across; the Inugumi is running out of time. I'm glad that Miroku's found a lead.

"Darkness precedes every light." *There's* that classic psquare poetry! *smirk*

Oh, I love your Sesshô-maru. You express both sides of him well; the part he shows externally, which is laconic and even cruel, and his caring, inner portion. You actually had me fear to Jaken when Sesshô-maru discovered his corpse. I keep forgetting about Tenseiga. I really love this description: "Through a black-tinted inner eye..."

And his raw determination to find Rin and keep her safe... ah, I see a common tie forming between the groups we're following thus far, and this comes into even bigger play later in the chapter.

I'll admit, me being the canon fanatic that I am, I was a little thrown that you'd created an alternate death to Inu-Yasha's father. Canon states that he died at the hand of Ryuukossei, but I'm assuming that you know that and are switching things around for the purposes of your fic. (After all, Ryuukossei came unsealed himself and the world didn't end. *sheepish grin*) I think it's fascinating that this half-demon was so much like Midoriko... I've got my theories on further connections, but so far you're doing a good job at tying together your plots and keeping the various groupings of characters close to you - they're not straying that far from their personalities, and while everyone feels a little... understated, I think it's great that you're working with such a huge cast and keeping everyone under control.

"The end of the world" piqued my curiosity, as I'm sure you intended to. I can't wait to see what comes of it. And way to work a purpose for Sess into it with "Tenseiga is our only hope." *squees*

Hee. Mushin's comic relief made me laugh. And the way it transitioned into Naraku's bit... well, the first line of *his* section just blew me away. "Only one evil" is right. *nods*

...it certainly has been awhile hasn't it? I must make up for lost time! *bowbowbowbowbow* Until later! ^_^

Cool story so far, can't wait until the next chapter is up!

Yep; still continuing to enjoy it. ^^ Power outages have kept me from reviewing; please forgive the delay. ((bows))

I'm a bit disappointed to say that, as far as plot goes, the fic's regressed somewhat. I'm getting the sense that nothing has really incited it to make it go forward; we're still wading in the exposition. But what makes up for it is the mental scampering I have to do to keep up with the ties that bind the characters together.

Taking it one section at a time: you weren't kidding when you said Toutousai would be appearing "soon." ^^ I liked the meter you used to aid his and Myouga conversation; I noticed that the more "fiery" comments were made after "fire," and more subtle ones after "darkness." It makes an interesting effect.

Also, you manage to describe the character's you're introducing *very* well. I guessed who Kuranosuke (*squee*) was before his name was mentioned. And I'm loving that all my favorite side characters are making appearances! You said somewhere that this fic would feature a huge amount of characters from the cast; again, this was no understatement.

Kuranosuke killing off the wolf tribe was something that I could alternately see him doing and keeping himself from doing. He seems to me like more of a passive lord... but Koga's thoughts on the matter, how it's not right... it gives it justification. Do I sense that Takeda-sama might be possessed? Either that, or you're opening the fic up to future points that may arise, especially considering that Kuranosuke now has Koga's shards.

Taking a second here to express my love for the description of the bullets entering Koga's leg. I'll use the old metaphor pertaining to witnessing a train crash: it's horrifying, but simeltaneously beautiful. You've got a knack for showing internal and external pain in the characters. Excellent job.

And, ick, my Koharu is so OOC compared to yours. XP *envy* It was particularly evident in the section where she rambled about her pot; I keep forgetting that she's still a girl.

Rin without a voice seems reminiscent of her first appearance in the animanga. Because it was elaborated on so much, it is most definetely important. I was a bit surprised to see her portrayed in an angsty light here; it's intersting...

One tiny nitpick: "'You wouldn’t believe how surprised I was to find lying on the forest floor...'" I think there's supposed to be a "you" in there...?

Ah! What a suspenseful tone you've left us hanging on. Cryptic, that it is... thank you for the pleasant read; I can't wait to read more! ^__^ ((bows again))

Ah, I can feel the plot! From the first few lines, I could feel the story really begin to pick up and find it's pace. Excellent structuring, psqaure-chan! ^^

*ahem* As you can probably tell, this was an absolutely compelling read (one that I should have read much earlier than now--gomen!). Though it didn't focus solely on Kouga and Rin as I'd predicted before clicking the link, working the Inugumi in was clever. And, judging by Miroku's comments, I'm sure we'll run into them again soon.

From the moment I read the word "crater," the thought popped into my head that it had been housing the monster you'd described in chapter one. I assume it was also the one that attacked Rin at the very end?

Really loved Miroku's dialogue and the little personality nuances that you wove in. To me, the most notable one was the following:

"'We didn't need to know that!' Inu Yasha broke in, unable to contain himself. 'If the knowledge you gain is at the cost of risking Kag – our lives, then –'"

Inu-Yasha *attempting* to be subtle about the girl he loves and failing to achieve that level of implicitness brought a smile to my face.

But, darn... the suspense! ((wants to know what happened to Rin)) I've got a mess of predictions swimming about in my head that are refusing to sort themselves out. ((sighs)) I can wait, though. Not too long, hopefully. ~_^

((bows)) 'Till later!

Woah... RinKouga? Interesting; I'd never really considered that pairing, whether in a romantic, platonic, or other sort of sense. Way to be creative! ((cheers))

Onto the actual review: as one can see in "And all else will fade," you've really got a knack for writing supernatural thrillers. The opening section's descriptions paint a haunting but captivating mental picture; it really burrows into a reader's head deeply and makes itself comfortable there. And despite the fact that you established a wholly fantastical feel, the line "lightning never [strikes] the same place twice" adds a sense of realism, almost bringing the reader into the story. (And these were just a few paragraphs!)

Characterization is, as always, on target. I doubt that Ginta and Hakaku would play such a big role in the hunt as was portrayed, but their diminutive status was still prevalent. I liked how you juxtaposed the fast-paced opening scene with a jarring "'Keep quiet!'" Though, I will admit, when Jaken incinerated the boar with the Staff of Two Heads (TM), it definetely made me laugh. ^^

There's already a connection between Kouga and Rin, as you indicated. I was (and still am) uncertain whether Rin truly recalled how she'd died, but, for this fic's purposes, I'm willing to say that she has and she did. Relating Rin to Kagome is a nice comparison, too, and the final lines of the chapter leave the reader waiting.

Grammar and spelling were pretty much perfect, and there wasn't a whole lot that disturbed the chapter's flow. My one squick would be that not much *happened* in this part, but it is only the first chapter; I can be patient. ^^

I always love reading your fics, so I hope I get to see more soon. Take care! ((bows))

Looks really good ^^