Hey are those two people Shiei's and Hiei's kids? Sure sounds like it... Oh and Great job! Loved this update!

Okay...it's nice, but a few nit-picky thingers. Mainly with "Takori's" speech

“A group of human females faint, Kurama and Maki’s mother being one of them. Kurama and Maki think she has the illness may young girls and women have been getting. The truth is she fainted from being out in the heat too long, that is why she woke up so quickly. She doesn’t get the illness until about a week later.”

He's from the future, yeah...but lookie. "A group of human females faint" this has already happened so it should be in the past,i.e. have fainted. "may young girls and women have been getting." I ask you the sense in that one. May young girls and women? Probably a typo though. And finally:

"She doesn’t get the illness until about a week later." BAM! He's talking about event in the future but talking in the past tense? WTH? How's about something like "until about a week from now."?

Otherwise, very nice and well done.

Alright keep goinG!~

Keep updating don't stop.

The cliffy was prizeless!
Dont hate me but it would be good to have longer chapters! I think you should also try to give more details and Informations in your story, it makes half of it and I know of what I am speaking of, (shuders in thinkink how many times she was remembered on that also from others!)
Anyway, I begin to like it and after some time it isnt that hard to follow your storyline, it is only a little different but not bad. All needs practise even writing, took it to my watch here and will come back to be a pest in your rev section, Lol!
( fly´s to the next story)

I told you I would come to read it, it´s 10,00 a clock here and I have a breack for today( I am tired as hell!
Anyway´s I like your occ in this so fare, dont seem to much mary sue to me until now, question, this demon was he possessed? It would be good to have some information more because I hung here a little in finding out whats going on. But any other sounds good so fare...will go back to read!

*snicker* oh no! Its the evil cliff hanger. nicely writen tho'...

Interesting story, although it is awkward how you put your madeups in the story just like that... Chapters are kinda short... well, update soon.

hah, its a little longer. I can't see the whole thing in one page like the last one. Anywho...I dunno if Kurama would "scream" perhaps call, shout for, etc? Its all about your diction Kurokari.

and one typo, "but they all made sue" sue? sue? should it not be sure? XD okay, done being a pain in the neck. nicely written again...but try and work on the length...

Short. Short. Short. *waves a finger in front of face* make them longer.

Er..."did a chipper laugh" >> hardly a problem there, but I must must must complain about how awkward it sounds, to me at least, "laughed chipperly" just sounds overall better. and le "Kurama. Maki" I think Botan was still listing, so a comma woulda worked better then le period.

Otherwise nicely done overall and can't wait to see more